Thump, the paper bag hit the table harder than intended. Briar looked up at Jackson with a rare look of surprise, “What’s this?”
He slid into his usual seat, eyes cast downward onto the table, “Uh, I mentioned that you didn’t eat at school and aunt Lois insisted on making you a lunch. So, yeah, us sorry.”
Briar put away her worksheet and replaced it with the bag, “Don’t apologize,” she said simply, taking out the food. As they ate, they kept up a consistent idle chatter. That is, until Jackson changed the topic.
“Speaking of Mr. Hettly, have you been keeping up with the Wenton case? I mean, the project is over, but it’s kinda interesting you know?” Jackson said between bites of hardly-edible school food.
“I haven’t,” she lied, resisting the urge to pick at the phantom blood beneath her nails.
“Well they got a match on that DNA they found at the scene. They won’t release anything else yet, but I’m pretty sure they found the killer.”
“They think.”
“What?”
“You’re pretty sure they think they found the killer.”
Jackson shrugged, “Same difference.”
Briar shook her head, “No, if they really did catch the killer, then you can be assured that the right person would be accused of the crime. If they are wrong, however, then there is a risk of the wrong person being convicted.”
Jackson shrugged again, emulating a small, clueless bird, “You’re not wrong, but if their DNA was at the crime scene, then why haven’t they come forward or something? If they aren’t the killer, then they could know something no one else does.”
“That’s true,” Briar admitted, “but the fear of being wrongfully convicted could be a factor as well.”
And so their conversation went. All through lunch and in the space between classes, they exhausted every possibility until they both ran out of counter-arguments. They said goodbye at the end of the day without reaching a clear conclusion.
~
Briar had only just stepped into the foyer when he father’s voice stopped her in her tracks.
“Eleanor,” he said, ever gently, “is your sister here?”
Briar nodded, “She returned through the back door.”
“Retrieve her.”
“Yes, father.”
Soon enough, a group of three were gathered in the small dining room, which was still plenty large enough to comfortably host a small banquet.
“Girls, I have an assignment for you,” Carlson said. The girls knew better than to fill the silence of his pause.
“You are to make a copy of the DNA evidence found at the crime scene and destroy the original. I expect you will be able to do this easily enough?”
Queenie snorted, “Give me two hours, I’ll be in and out.”
“You’ll need at least four,” Briar corrected, “That is, if you’re working on your own, as you implied.”
Queenie was about to snap back with some smart remark when Carlson interjected, “Girls, what have I told you about arguing?”
“That it is ‘counterproductive and childish’.” Briar quoted.
“Very good. Now, I need you both to gear up. Queenie is the distraction this time, we can’t risk anything on this one. I expect you both back by ten tonight.”
“Understood.” came the united reply.
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Heyo Cyro! Can that be your nickname? Cyro? It sounds nice with Heyo. Actually, not really. Whatever.

Hope your doing well today! Once again, I'm here to give you a review.
*finishes reading*
*gaps*
Cyr, you... you... you're so... whoa. I don't even, like, what!? Am I imagining this, or does Briar have two names - Eleanor and Briar - and Briar/Eleanor is a criminal. I can't believe it. O.O You def have me hooked, girl. This is madness!! How could she DO this to me? *cries* I still love her though, don't worry, worry bug. Lol. Anyways, this time you have left me way down there. No spelling mistakes, no punctuation mistakes, no grammatical mistakes, so great job with that, my friend! I'm gonna go onto read the next part.
(So much for a 'review'. I'm not gonna make this a review.)
Keep on writing!
~Liberty500
I'm glad you like it so far!
I like it very much!
Hey!

I'm gonna leave a short review on this one since no one else seems to have gotten to it.
Intriguing chapter. I mean, I'd rather go and read the next part ASAP, but this needs reviewing on review day
So I just looked up and saw that you're only fifteen - and gosh, you write so good! I know friends of mine in my school - older than me- who couldn't write better.
The guy brings you lunch to school - just how cool is that? and how sweet! (personally though, i don't think such guys- or families exist in the world. I love how it is possible in the realm of stories).
This part seems..... off, you know? The line doesn't really catch up with the great flow of this entire story; it throws me off every time I re-read the part. Maybe 'continued' would be better than 'went'? Or even 'they feel back into idle talk.'
Our young Briar's a criminal - *gasps*
It was coming though, i guess. I just thought that she'd be someone who was forced to do it - not someone for whom it was an 'assignment.' It certainly throws a new kind of light to the story - it's too soon to say whether that's good or bad.
Anyway, Jackson gets sweeter by the minute and Briar's personality blooms more and more into focus. Even though I feel as if this part wasn't really up to the mark if i compare it with the other parts (i mean, come one, her secret's revealed; it could be more of a big occasion, right?).
Anyway, happy reviewing, and keep writing! I'm gonna go read that last part!
Thanks for the review, I wasn't really sure about that one line either so I'll go back an try to re-work it.