I wander a street,
Admiring the buildings to either side.
A diverse collection of history
In two-by-fours and I-beams.
In the distance, skyscrapers sharp as the suits its tenants wear
Brush blunt edges against low-hanging clouds.
They remind me of stories--
The best ones,
The type made of metal,
And wood that gives you splinters.
A bustle of activity,
Historic and strong;
Unyielding.
Able to support themselves
Throughout years of tests,
From scholars to weathering.
Down an alley and to the left
Lie the streets long forgotten by city maintenance.
Spray-painted brick and
Boarded up windows,
Like books fashioned
From animal hides and lamb's wool.
They might as well be huts and lean-toos,
More history lessons than historic structures.
Some, like myself,
Find these buildings have a strange beauty,
But the stories akin to their structure
Are anything but.
Straight ahead
Lie the stories in-between.
New businesses and restaurants,
Innovation and hope,
Stone and Kevlar,
Cotton woven with ripcord.
Too new to be historic yet—
Just trying to survive.
Some may crumble into the marked-up pages
Of a ten-year-old social studies book,
But some may hold hands with the clouds
And link elbows with the sun.
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Hi Taylor!
ok so i'm new but i really like your poem. it has lot of depth and i love the comparison.(especially the pun). there is a variation in thought and imagination and you deliver a great piece of work my friend. there is a subtle tone i feel when reading the poem.it is inventive and creative and i believe that you are really gifted in poetry.
the only thing that interrupted me was the abrupt halt in sentences. other than that it was a good read and made me feel all fuzzy inside.
i look forward to reading more of your work.
Yumna
Hey, Taylor!
Wel, first of all, welcome to YWS, I hope you have a good experience as a member of this creative society!
Second of all, I love your poem! Despite the fact that it was based on realism, I could tell that you put of lot thought into this and used a lot of your wild imagination! It was deep, inventive, creative and it was an enjoyable read!
I look forward to reading your future works, my friend, because you have just earned yourself a like!
MissLyricz x
Hi jessiebear hear to review.
Ok I love the poem I can amazing it so that is good. But maybe ad a bit more fall stops for ins tins (In the distance, skyscrapers sharp as the suits its tenants wear) I think you can ad a fall stope at the end. And maybe ad a little bit more to the sentences. That is what I suggest. I hope I was not rood bleats tell me if I was. And this is really good so keep up the good work.