Please remember that this is all a draft, and really all I have so far, so bear with me. Comments and reviews, tips, etc... are welcome and encouraged! I also would like to hear Ideas, plots, events, and whatever else you can think of. I'd love to hear it. I had a dream literally last night, and I thought It would be a cool story.
Here is a draft summary of the story: After Adam's house was consumed by flames, he was discovered on the verge of death by the grim reaper, who called himself Death. Initially there to collect Adam's soul, Death felt a connection when he found him still alive in the wreckage. Instead of claiming him, he decided to take Adam under his wing and train him to become his successor as a human grim reaper.
The Grim Reaper
Young Adam
17 y/o Adam
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This premise has a compelling mix of dark fantasy and personal redemption, with plenty of potential for exploring themes like second chances, morality, and the thin line between life and death.
Hiya! I'm Hope.
Love the concept, the grim reaper is always an interesting character, and personifying death is always fun. Death having children is typically only seen in like, Percy Jackson style stories, so it is interesting to hear about one taking from European mythology. these kinds of things are hard to review (as moonlilly said) so this is less of a review-review and more like a list of things for you to ask yourself about your story.
Are you taking from the real world?
When does this take place?
Where does this take place?
What genre is this?
Why should the reader care about these characters?
why do these characters care about each other?
Who is the main character? (Adam)
Who is the mentor figure? (Death)
Is there a love interest?
Is there a best friend?
Is there a rival?
Is there an antagonist?
Is there a villain?
are there are side characters?
Do any of the characters have siblings/children/parents/cousins/pets?
Do any of the characters have habits or personal quirks?
Do any of the characters have abilities
What does the current scene look like?
What does the current scene smell like?
Who is in the background of the current scene?
What things would it make sense to be in the current scene? (a clock on the wall, a rug, a shelves)
What does the current scene sound like?
how does the POV character feel about the current scene?
What is the lighting like in the current scene?
what is the temperature of the current scene?
Are any of the characters based off of anyone?
What is the texture of the POV characters clothes?
What does the POV character think the other characters are feeling?
Why is this happening?
(without taking the plot in mind) How would a real person react to this situation?
Why is this happening for the plot?
Hello Hello, I hope you dont mind me popping in with a quick review. I will apologize that this might be on the short side. However, before I get into the work itself I want to say welcome. I hope you enjoy it here and if you have any questions don't be afraid to ask. Anyway let's get into it, shall we?
Overall This does have potential however this type of stuff is hard review. I understand that this is very early in the writing process but posting this at your current stage makes it tricky. There's not much to speak about when it comes to the premise. Although the idea of a human being raised by death and having to usher in death as a mortal is interesting, I feel the info given is a bit lacking.
For the premise, I would look at Loglines for both novels and movies to spark some ideas. Longlines are often one or two-sentence-long summaries of a work that would catch a viewer's attention. ( Think of the little blurbs you see in the tv guide.) Regardless of that, a good logline includes the protagonist their goal and the antagonistic force.
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Although not perfect it gives you an idea of who the novel will be following, the conflict she is in and who is opposing her. Why I am recommending this is to get you to focus on the core elements of the novel. Things like who Adam is what he wants to do in this narrative and possible challenges that create conflict. Some loglines include the inciting incident as well and that could further help flesh out the novel since the incdenting incident sets up the whole plot.
Now I would recommend thinking about themes this story might want to focus on. This is because characters' outlooks and dynamics are often shaped but what themes or arguments the book is trying to speak on.
I would comment on the setting and cast and how to flesh that but I have nothing to speak on here.
Lastly, if you want to see how others set up novels and brainstorming I would recommend looking at The Novmo ( Novel Month) Forums here. It just ended so there should be a few from this year.
Please forgive me if this sounds overly negative it's just tricky not to focus on things to flesh out right now. I wish you the best of luck. Keep writing and drink water!
Thanks for the input! I will be looking back on this review for tips when I have more to go off of from here, so when I get an Idea for a plot and a good storyline, I'll look here for help when I need it. ;D