Hey, I'm Homachi. Nice piece.
My thoughts...
At the beginning, I felt like the demons were supposed to be a reference to the humanity in you that drives your quickness to cause evil.
Then I wasn't sure what you were trying to convey any longer. Because the demons became actual entities that you then revolved your sadness about.
I mean at the beginning you mentioned "the mask of goodness". Meaning, you are to be both the demons and the one that wears the mask about.
I also make reference to the second paragraph "the good mask slips off and the evil becomes persuasive".
I loved the idea that you become or are originally a demon but when you dismantled the forces, I got lost.
No doubt, your writing is good but losing the general idea in a sort of dissolution, distorts the whole piece.
Again, when you mentioned "I endure the pain". I was like, wait, I thought it was "full of bliss".
In the end, I was rather confused.
I'm sorry if I laid it out a little flat but
In the end, this is just my opinion.
I'm sorry if I misinterpreted it, if I did.
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