Hey there ellmist. Just lizzy stopping by for a quick review. When I say your title I was intrigued. After I finished reading I felt I needed to review this work. Even if you were suffering from writer's block I found this was a wonderful, gripping story.
-Grammar and spelling is something that I do not like to dwell on for too long because the content and ideas always seem to be the most important. This element is still needed because I fell it turns readers away if they can not get through it due to issues. Thankfully your short story had no errors that I could spot except for the sentences being a little choppy. I believe someone already mentioned that.
-Now let's get on to content. The point is very straightforward and well supported. I admit the section of italics also intrigued me and made me delve further into the story. Also, loved the descriptive word choice.
Like I said before this was just a quick review. Great job, loved it, and I hope you write a sequel of sorts.
-lizzy
Points: 650
Reviews: 766
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