Love is beautiful when both people give the same ammount, but the reality is that sometimes it just doesn't go that way.
Sometimes you love a person so much but they love someone else, weather it's going on behind your back or right infront of you.
And it hurts... It hurts alot. Because you loved and gave them everything you could, and all that person does is throw it away and substitute you for someone else.
But when this happens to you dont try and make it right. If they love someone else just leave them. There not coming back . So go find someone who does deserve you, someone who won't just look at your perfections but love your imperfections, someone who makes you feel happy when your down and finally just someone who loves you just the way you are.
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Hi!
I really liked this piece/article. I like the topic. Everything here is so true.
Now, I have some nitpicks for you.
1. "Amount" was misspelled. You added an extra "m"
2. "Weather it's going on..." Change the first word to "whether". It was only a misspelling. So don't worry.
3. ..."Or right infront...""infant" is two words.
4. "Alot" is also two words.
5. "Dont" is a contraction, so please add an apostrophe.
6. "There not coming back." Change the first word to "They're"
I think you did an excellent job on this piece. Keep practicing and never give up. You are a talented writer.
*Follows you* *presses the "like" button*
If you have any questions, just let me know. Good luck and keep writing!! BTW--I love your avatar.
Hey! ChocolateCello here!
So, almost all the gammer mistakes I noticed were pointed out in the previous review. I still have a few things that were left out though. First of both "reality" and "love" need to be capitalized in your title. "The Reality of Love". Also, (Very minor), in the sentence "There not coming back ." you have an unneeded space between back and the period. (The previous review already pointed out the spelling mistake with 'there' vs. 'they're').
Off of grammar and onto content, I only have one thing that I, personally, would change.
"So go find someone who does deserve you, someone who won't just look at your perfections but love your imperfections, someone who makes you feel happy when your down and finally just someone who loves you just the way you are."
The last part of the sentence ("someone who loves you just the way you are.") is very bold and strong, which it good, but it would stand out more in it's own sentence. If you were simply to say "...feel happy when you are down. Find someone who loves you just the way you are" that would make the last part significantly bolder.
Hope this helps!
-ChocolateCello
Hey there... Smiles! Yeah, yeah, I'll call you Smiles...
*ahem*
I'ven't exactly reviewed in... quite a while... So I might be a bit rusty. Never was any good in the first place. This review will mainly, if not completely, address grammatical errors because that's all I'm really good at when reviewing.
Before we start, welcome to YWS! Bit late, but welcome nonetheless!
Alright, on to the grammar/spelling corrections...
First line and there's a spelling mistake.
Really easy, you gave "amount" and extra M. Just go and drag that stowaway off the ship.
Here you should have used "whether" rather than "weather" and "infront" should be "in front".
I'm pretty sure you meant "a lot" and not that it hurts this guy:
Let's just squeeze an apostrophe into that "dont" there, yeah? Real easy fix.
I'd suggest a comma after "else", but that's just how I'd write it, I don't know if it's grammatically correct.
Here you should have used "they're", the contraction of "they" and "are", as opposed to "there" which refers to a place.
"You're" ("you" and "are"), not "your", should be the word used here. Also, I'd suggest a comma after "finally". Maybe before it, after "and", too, but that's just how I'd write it. I use a lot of commas. >.> (ellipses too...)
Anyway, in short, a nice piece. I didn't really like it because romance, lovey dovey stuff isn't really my thing
and I'm also currently worrying about my crush liking someone else >.>but it's... it's a'right.Hope this review helped you in some way (preferably grammar-wise, because if it helped any other way you're probably not reading my review, you're reading a better one elsewhere).
Keep writing and have fun!
-Hatt