Because breaking the RevMo bar is apparently cool I am totally here to review this!
Kind of. Alright, let's go -
Line one: These two words are very simple but I love the 'found poetry' thing you have goin g on here and I'm immediately thinking this could be on a sign outside a house. You could totally put this on one of those for sale signs and then stick it in someone's garden and then you'd have both poetry and art!
Line two: Oooh, shock, horror baby parts! Even these two lines on their own would be enough to be deadly.
Lines three and four: Aww it's so sad! The brevity of the lines is really cutting and it definitely has strong emotion.
More seriously...
I'm familiar with the reference and I think it's fun but to really in keep with the style maybe it should have been 'Baby lungs/ Never used' or 'Baby lungs/ Used once'? Or maybe that's too much thinking for one of those 'here's something you should be thinking about' pieces.
Anyway, one review closer to catching up with you. Oh yeah.
Yes I'm seriously counting this (though not without some modicum of guilt I promise you) so there :p
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