Hey! Forever here with a review!!
I think this was quite a good beginning to a novel which intrigues the reader to wonder what is going to happen next. It was very mysterious- the way everything went I mean. I was fascinated by how events took turn even in the very first chapter. However, there were a few places which were very unclear to me but maybe that is due to the fact that it is only the first chapter. Maybe things will get clearer soon.
Okay I found the relation between the witch and the human beings that the narrator depicted very interesting. I actually enjoy seeing different views on this subject this one of the most interesting one. Hm... It's kind of true that normal human beings are kinda ignorant of the magic powers of witch and wizards. We don't really ponder a lot about their existence and it's a general truth that they don't exist. I liked how you succeeded at providing some intriguing view on the topic.
At some places, I got lost as I have mentioned previously. Like first of all, who is this 'he'? I guess his identity was not mentioned for the sake of mystery but I think some hints could be dropped about who he actually was in reality. Some wizard? An enemy of the narrator or a friend of the narrator? I very much want to know it. Apparently it seems that he is an enemy but hm... Interesting. Oh also I found it quite intriguing how the narrator managed to see their watch inside the grave and managed to survive for that long. If that was for witch power, I would recommend a relatively clearer mention of that in the text.
The narrator is definitely in a very bad condition. I think they are in a constant threat that they would be killed and now I find it a bit ironical that they are kind of fakibg their death and taking the risk. I don't know but I didn't find that worry in the narrator. Maybe they are not that worried but I do think that a person would be worried in the situation. Seems like their aunt is the only person who understands them. I wonder about their parents and where they are. The last stanza was a littlw info-dumping but I guess that's not a problem. Overall, I enjoyed reading it and it makes a good first chapter. I would only say to revise it a bit and include the necessary details.
Keep Writing!!
~Forever
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