Hello this is Foxmaster!!!!! *Dances*
Whoooooa what a chapter! I have to say that I am really getting IN to this now! I mean, like, at the beginning... *goes back to check first chapter and gets embarrassed when seeing old review and wishing you could travel back in time to actually REDO that review again, XD*Okay, so in the first chapter we get some HINTS of the magic (Just imagine whatever I'm capitalizing is italiced, [of course I can't spell that at all]) and now we're really getting INTO the magic stuff! Woo-hoo! Okay, so now let's get to the actual review and not listen to me make so many random side comments........
Mireya nodded. “So, they said we had to ‘burn’ through it. That could be literal and require Flare, or we try to deactivate it using Acid.”
“It’s probably going to take Acid,” Cyrin mused. “That will use up a fair bit of what I have, though, so I’ll try Flare first. It won’t make a difference.”
Mireya inched away as he flipped the MagicBox open again and separated a tiny cluster of magic from the wound-up ball. Flare was not only the least wasteful of the nine magic types, but it was also the easiest to use, which meant Cyrin could create a spell one-handed even when that hand was getting numb. It floated above his palm as he spun it around, rearranging the tiny glowing strands until he could snap his fingers and it turned into a fireball that warmed his hand. They moved it over to the shield, but the fireball only sputtered weakly against it, giving off sparks instead of burning the magic.
So here, I am loving the magicbox thing, like you need to trademark that or something, just saying. The Acid part (pointers on the capital A) is interesting.... I'm imagining literal acid and I think that's it but it's magical now... ohh!
[quote“Come on, you’re from Storm City too. You know it gets cold here.”
“The bottom of an ice pit that has never been subject to seasonal change is not the same as surface of a city where every room has a fireplace, Cyrin.”
Cyrin shrugged. “Fireplaces don’t stop blizzards.”
She did have a point, though, and the cold hit them even harder when they had to pull off their other glove to cast a harder spell. After considering, he removed somewhere between a third and a half of the magic he had left from his supply. He could see Mireya raise her eyebrows at the amount, but she didn’t say anything. It was going to take some work to get through this.[/quote]
Storm City? So there are magical places too? Now I really want to know more about whatever this storm place is..... although the fireplace part is so true. So, like, I know that all the magic here is finite, but why not just do a quick warming-up spell? Coldness problem solved. Just like that. *snaps fingers in front of screen to prove point*
[quote“Oh,” she breathed, her voice surprised.
“What is it?”
“You know what, don’t worry about it. Just wait until you get through.”
Cyrin frowned, but he had to turn his attention back to the hole in the shield. It continued expanding, but it was slowing substantially, and they knew it would start closing soon. They waited until it seemed like it wouldn’t get any larger before they slipped through, ducking and stepping through it one leg at a time. It wasn’t actually that tight a fit, which was good news for their exit. Cyrin stood up on the other side, just as the hissing of Acid on magic faded and the gap rapidly closed itself back up.
“So, what was it?” Cyrin asked, looking around before he saw it himself and blinked in surprise. “Oh. I see.”
Mireya was standing over a skeleton.
“I guess we aren’t the only ones to try and come down here,” she said as Cyrin stepped closer, frowning and leaning over the remains.
“They must have barely gotten through the shield on their way out before… getting caught and falling backwards.” He shook his head. “Who knows how old this is.”
“It’s just bones,” Mireya said slowly. “But this place is a freezer, and there’s nothing here that could decompose it. No insects, no fungi, nothing. So…”[/quote]
TALK ABOUT A DARK TURN!!!!!! Ohhhhhhh *hums dramatic music in background*
Cyrin cleared their throat. “The Banes have teeth, don’t they?”
Mireya glanced up sharply, and they both shared a look full of disgust and horror at the idea.
“Well, I think the desire to not end up that way is enough to make me get out of here,” she said briskly, moving on to the room further in. “Don’t you agree? Oh, wow— look at this place.”
good question..... dun dun dunnnnnnn! I also kind of hope that these characters make it out alive......
that's all! I am sooooooo continuing this and am so impressed! This was good! (Also, if you are looking for anything to review, you could do my work.)
-Foxmaster!!!
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