Hello, FlamingPhoenix here with a short review for you on this lovely night, and to help get your work out the green room.
Okay let's begin with the review shall we?
So Out of the whole poem I only saw two things that needs to be fixed, their not big mistakes and are easy to miss as the reader, trust me it happens to me a lot.
Anyway here is the first one.
A generation for whom nose masks would be a must- have.
Now the word in bold is what I would like to talk to you about, you see in this sentence you did get across what you wanted to say well, but the word in bold means nose like the nose on your face. I think you meant to say 'knows.' But this is a very small thing.
Okay onto the last thing I saw.
Let us race to save Mother Earth, she is slowly running out breath
Not there is nothing wrong with the words in bold here, but you need an 'of' between them.
And that's all for now, I really liked reading your work, it was really well written and I agree with everything you have said, it's really true, and there isn't anything we can really do about it.
I think your flow was really good, it aloud your reader to catch all the emotions that was put into your words, that were also very well picked.
Over all this was amazingly written, I loved everything about it, from the title to the ending. Just amazing, and I'm glad I got to be one of the people to read and review your work, I hope you will keep writing amazing things and post again on YWS soon. Have a great day or night.
Your friend
FlamingPhoenix.
Reviewing with a fiery passion.
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