When I was done with the delay; my world was ruined. The beauties were no longer beautiful. The tree that perfectly shaded me was split in two. My hopes and dreams were like shattered glass on the landscape. My beautiful world was created by lies. I was blinded by a false love; that lead me to believe her world was what I needed.
Love
I did not know anyone could love me until you did. How do you love me with all my scars and problems? How can you see any beauty?
Love
I did not know I could feel that again until I felt it towards you. When she left, I thought I was done with that term. I lost hope in ever feeling it again, and yet here you are. You make me feel something. You make me feel alive.
I was ready to end it all. I left my destroyed world, and planned to never restore it. You changed that; you showed me that I could have a future. One were I am not drowning in sorrow, and pain of being alone. With you I am no longer alone.
Now I am in a new world. One were I can be truly happy, and with the one I love. You helped me create it, and it is ever so lovely. The new beauties are so beautiful. The shattered glass on the landscape is no longer. Instead with you, I have new hopes and new dreams.
So I say thank you. Thank you for your love. I thank you for being true beauty in my life. The colors will forever be vibrant. My love will forever grow with each passing day we are together.
I hope there will never be a delay with you.
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Hello!
I will call this a review because its kinda long, even though its only one point i have to make.
This poem is really beautiful , and sweet, and it flows really well. However, i feel that its a bit inconsistent. You start with these beautiful descriptions about how he felt after his last love. Then you have the repitition of 'Love' between there two paragraphs, but then it ends. Then for two paragraphs, you weren`t as descriptive, and mostly were literal and direct. But you pick up the descriptions in the last couple paragraphs.
That`s all i have to say, and other than that it was a really beautiful story.
~Lucy
Hello,here for a short review!
I do not think of saying so many critical words about this work.You do not need to regret writing this!
I think it is very beautiful even if the topic is so sad but still so beautiful.At least me as a reader..I felt like you express your feelings to me and explained me what are you feeling about thos topic.In the end the work is finished in a very beautiful way.I would just tell you to double check your punctuation.Maybe the "Love" lines in Italic.
Overall,good job.