I'm very thrilled to leave you a review!
Let's start right away!
So, I really love the fact that you're writing about a goddess that's going on earth and writing in a diary! I love magic!
You're starting off with a very engaging beginning and it makes readers want to read on. That's great, because I've often read stories were the beginning wasn't as gripping as yours. And I got bored so I would quit them, but your story on the other hand is very engaging, interesting with a lovely twist of magic in there.
About Cloudburst: I am very impressed that you created your own world! And the name; it's just wow! I don't even have words enough to describe it. Just wonderful. From reading parts of her diary I know that Cloudburst is a rather mystical place and is some sort of safely heaven.
You keep releasing small pieces of Angie's backstory and not everything in one blowoff. That's good and keeps the reader engaged and wanting to read on.
I can also read that Angie was not very happy up there, but that she likes it more on earth. She seems more calm and graceful on earth. She thinks she is more like a girl in her classroom named Katie. That's good, because that way readers can find similarities to the characters and themself maybe and that makes it easier to connect with the characters; to feel that Angie feels and to think what Angie thinks (correct me if i'm wrong)
Your writing is very impressive! I loved reading this story! Keep up the great work, I hope to read more from you soon!
If you could read & review my story: "MaryAnna" also. I would be very thrilled!
Ps: Love the name Raven16 (makes me think of a badass girl from the netflix serie: the 100)