Young Writers Society

Hello! So I would like to preface this review by saying that I have never reviewed anyones work before, and by no means am I any kind of professional writer, so.... here goes.
To start off, I love the theme of this poem. It has a interesting question being put into more of a spiritual perspective.
I think my favorite line is the
"Free will is an illusion, we have no real choices"
It adds another dimension of thought to think about.

I liked it a lot, you chose to write about a very interesting topic, and the rhyming is perfect! It could’ve been a bit longer (hope this isn’t offensive) and, oh also, you need not right the name of the poem again. But, other than that, I really liked this poem!

Momo, here to review!

I liked it! Personally, I don't believe in fate, or destiny, or stuff like that, but this is still really good! I wanted to point a few things out, so here you go!

I think you should capitalize every line. It would make it look better.

We may never know. We might find out

we might find out what life is all about.

This was wonderful, and it reminds me of something I did in fifth grade, (excluding the part where it wasn't great). I'm not exactly an expert at poetry, but I'll do my best to lend a helping hand in one little spot.

The set path for our lives

all of it until the man with scythes.

Wow! Honestly, I've never been the kinda of person to be a poetry fan but once I came onto Young Writers Society I've been reading all kinda of cool stuff, now including yours! I really like how you talk about destiny as if it's something that you can't change. This entire poem blends together so nicely and the translations are outstanding! If I had to choose a favorite part it'd definitely be the one about free will being an illusion. "Free will is an illusion, we have no real choices, they have taken everything, even our voices." I think that everyone can definitely relate to this line at some point in their lives and it's worded so perfectly. Love the poem!
-Maryah

@LordMomo