Published January 17, 2009
I was in the #nanowrimo chatroom and used the bot, BattleJesus, to give me a prompt. What does it give me you ask?
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So, here it is! Hope you enjoy my random, freshly mopped prompt!
Sparkle Sparkle. Yup, you heard me. I said, sparkle sparkle. No, I’m not a vampire. I’m just a good ol’ fashioned sparkly kitchen floor.
There’s nothing that makes us kitchen floors happier than being freshly mopped. The nice clean feeling is to die for. I mean seriously, after a month of nothing but dirty shoes and spilled dinner, what could be better than a nice mopping? Nothing, that’s what!
Today was a good one too. They didn’t just mop me; they got down on their knees and scrubbed me clean! I haven’t been this clean in ages!
Ahhh! This feels so good! Wait, what’s that sound…. Oh no! The kid is bringing the dog in! Hey you! Keep that mutt away from me! NOOOO!
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Haha, this was cute. ^_^ It needs a bit more conflict though... I would suggest adding a sentence that says something along the lines of, "I wasn't sparkly before" and then just continue from that thought. Of course, that's only a suggestion--these writing suggestions are a bit odd, lol! I'm not sure how far you want to continue with it. But whatever! Cute story!
Haha, I loved this.
Good grammar.
Good story.
Although I'd tweak the last line to make it sound a little better. I still liked it very much.
Love always,
-jade.
This is really funny!
I also like the vampire reference. *coughtwilightpuncough*
Absolutely nothing to nit-pick. Your grammar is flawless, and the satire fits.
Reason I mention satire is I usually don't like a lot of it in prose. But, like I said, it fits.
Where do you get these prompts anyway?
BattleJesus can be found in #NaNoWriMo on IRC.GoodChatting.com
NICE!!! Where is this BattleJesus anyway? *goes to NaNoWriMo chatroom*
Interesting, and I like your vampire reference.