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Hello
Your poem is quite beautiful. I found myself have to look up the word juxtapose, and once I figured out that it was, in fact, a word, I thought if very clever of you to place it right next to "just a pose." It flows beautifully. Another part that stuck out to me was the rhyme of crippling and whittling. It was interesting for the rhyme to take place at the end of one line and in the middle of another.
"these tears have dried our eyes left us blind. "
This line was powerful to me, but I thought that maybe you could have put a comma between the words eyes and left.
Other than that I couldn't find a thing I would have changed in your poem. It was awesome because it was full of raw, honest emotion. Reading it brought a tear to me eye. When a poem can do that, you know it's a good one. Keep up the work!
Hello
I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. I apologise as I'm not the best at reviewing. However, I loved the concept of the poem and thought it was very gripping. I loved the desperation feeling and thought it was very effective and built up the emotion. I also really liked how words rhymed despite not being at the end of the line for example, "sedation, justification, foundation, medication." I must say I liked how the same rhyme ran on if you get me. I thought the whole poem flowed very well and the sentences joined together very nicely with a the kind of quick, panicky feeling the character in the poem would be feeling.
I also was unsure about the word "juxtapose" but looked it up and *hands up in surrender* fair enough, it is a valid word. I can't find anything bad about your poem.
I loved it; keep up the good work
~World
Hello, Kanome here with a review.
This poem is very saddening. It is also interesting. I love the flow of the poem, and the concept of it.
I love the wording you used in this poem, which makes the poem more interesting than it already is.
The only nitpick I have is this:
juxtapose.
I don't understand what that is. Is it a typo?
Anywho, this poem really dives into the reader's mind, making them the feelings the person in your poem is feeling. That's one of the main reasons I like this poem.
Keep up the great work! I can't wait to read more.
Kanome