You People

by Quetseli

  • Poetry
  • Dramatic

Published March 17, 2010

In Invisible

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You people never understand me
You people only hate
You people taunt and tease
And laugh in my face
You people never see me
You people just walk pass
You people bumb me in the hallway
And I don't hear a "Sorry"
You people never hear me
You people steal my voice
You people laugh at me
When I have something to say
It's you people that I hate
It's you people that burn me
It's you people that can't believe
That you killed me

And yet this still happens today...

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fiction903 wrote a review Review · Mar 17, 2010

You people never understand me
You people only hate
You people taunt and tease
And laugh in my face
You people never see me
You people just walk pass
You people bumb me in the hallway
And I don't hear a "Sorry"
You people never hear me
You people steal my voice
You people laugh at me
When I have something to say
It's you people that I hate
It's you people that burn me
It's you people that can't believe
That you killed me
I think the repetition of "You" in this poem does not work to your advantage. Also in the poem when you say " You people bumb me in the hallway." I think you might mean bump me in the hallway.If I were you I would also add punctuation. Have a great day. Fiction



Y'know, sometimes a family is a mutant superhuman clown with cartoony powers, a hyperactive shapeshifter created in a lab, the ghost of an artificially created being who only exists for exposition, a cat who is an eldritch god for some reason, and an emo guy who doesn't canonically exist
— GengarIsBestBoy