Yoooo, Querencia. Back again.
He didn’t really think it was fair that this much crazy stuff could be going on in his town and he still had to do calculus homework.
Hah!
“Monica!” Finnley said, astonished. He sat up straight. “I didn’t know you had a phone. Can ghosts call people?”
“Sort of. Look, I’m not really calling you. Does it sound like my voice is coming from the phone?” she asked.
Ghost privilege is getting to call people without having to fork out £25 per month for a phone contract.
In all seriousness, though, I like this. It's a neat idea and I love how nonplussed Finnley is by it.
He slowly turned his head and saw Monica sitting on his bed, wearing stylish overalls and a headband, petting his rabbit. He forced himself to hold in a scream while he tried to calm down. Monica saw him and laughed. “Could’ve given me a warning,” Finnley huffed in a disgruntled sort of way.
“That wouldn’t be any fun though!”
Have I mentioned that I love Monica
"Look. I just came here to tell you those things I was supposed to tell you. It's why I came back, you know? It's why I'm a... a ghost, and it's why I'm here with you now."
Oh, so it's to do with Finnley? Interesting. I wonder if she has a connection to Allie somehow? It feels like high time that the matter of Allie came back into the plot in some way, because it felt like it played a big role at the beginning but has kind of been forgotten about.
"I'm playing hide and seek!" Monica called from another room. "Come and get me!"
Finnley laughed and ran down the hallway, his feet making light slapping noises on the cool wooden floor. As he was peering into a closet, Monica appeared right behind him. Finnley screamed, and it was high pitched enough that he was embarrassed.
I am kind of shipping these two cuties. Which is terrible, because one of them is dead and relationships with dead people generally don't work out so well.
Monica doubled over with laughter, though she seemed a bit blurred.
Finnley blinked hard. "Monica..."
I think you handle the transition from light-hearted humour to something more serious really well. I can feel the mood flattening and it makes me sort of sad, in a way, because I just feel like Monica deserves so much more than she has.
Monica hadn't said she looked like Finnley — she'd said that he looked like her.
Oh, that's a subtle detail that I didn't notice. I like that. Is Allie chilling out in the spirit world as well and she and Monica have met? Has Monica come back because Allie can't for some reason?
This is one of my favourite chapters for quite a while. It's got a lovely balance of humour and poignancy, and I love seeing the interactions between Monica and Finnley. There's a subtle note of mystery to it as well which I'm really intrigued by. Looking forward to the next chapter! I feel like I'm finally on the way to catching up now.
Keep writing!
~Pan
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