A
Star
Shines bright
In the darkness of
Night. It sits so far away,
So high up in the sky.
I wish I could take
A star home
With me.
But…
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Hey there, nice poem you wrote! Its so short and simple! I also like how you shape this poem into a diamond. If you're willing, write more! The word "butt" is such a cliffhanger for me.
By the way, I also want a star, but unfortunately its made up of gas so once you come to earth, it disappears.
Sunshine here to review...
keep on writing! Your poems are really great 
I look forward to more of your works. 
This poem is really neat. I like how you give your poems an actual shape to compliment your words. I do agree with Hadj, it did remind me of "Nothing Gold Can Stay." I kind of want you to continue with that thought.... But it's cool how you left it open ended. It makes the reader wonder and think about why you can't have a star.
"So high up in the sky."
That kind of reminded me of Twinkle, Twinkle, Little Star.
Your poem is simple, but meaningful. I don't have any nitpicks. This was a very beautiful poem.
Such a beautiful poem!
I felt a lot of happiness and beauty at the beginning, but by the end I felt it was saying something along the lines of "Nothing Gold Can Stay"
The formatting was beautiful, although it was a bit disappointing that you had to cut off words like "Night" to make it work.
Also, the abrupt ending is awesome!
Great work and keep writing!
~Hadj
Haii there.
I love the formatting in this! And I love how it takes the form of a star (sort of), but it's still simple to read.
I wish there was more to this. I like the feel of emotion in here, the plain, calm, sadness, the exasperation of not being able to take stars home.
For such a short poem, this has about half and half : emotion and imagery. There's not much imagery and description you can put in for a short poem like this, and it seems enough. It shines bright in night, yeah, got that. It's far, and it's high. And then you have your emotion half, which I already talked about.
I wish you could make a part two, or maybe longer? The "But" leaves me wondering. I mean, yeah, we know you can't have a star, but what other feelings will you feel?
(Of course, you don't have to make more. Only if you want.)
I love this poem, it pretty much states your opinion loud a clear. Great job, keep writing!
WillowPaw1~