Hello there, Purple ^^Now, I must say again, I'm not a poet myself and I haven't really reviewed poetry before today, so don't take whatever I say too close to your heart.I like how you portray that feeling of being different, yet finding beautiful things in it, in all your works. This one gives me the feeling of helplessness, something kind of desperate yet not quite negative emotions. It makes me think about how many people - regardless of deafness, though I don't want to be disrespectful or something - try to pass on their words, their thoughts, their dreams, and end up misunderstood, unheard, alone even though they're surrounded by others. I don't know if you were going for that, but like I said, I am only here to give you my honest opinion.The capitalization works nice too, adding up to those silent screams that can be felt throughout the entire poem. Overall, very interesting ^^Kind regards,Aria
Hey there, Purple Moment.I don't think I have reviewed your work before so this is my first time.At the start I didn't understand this but then when I kept on reading I understood what you were supposed to tell in this poem, I would suggest you put a description at the start. I still like it even though I didn't understand what you were trying to say.
Well hi there, PurpleMoment!I confess I don't really review poetry, but this one caught my eye. My first inpression was one of… vagueness? I'm not sure what you were trying to say, exactly. I also don't quite get why you're shouting with your hands, of all things. Again it's kind of vague, so, it doesn't tell me much. Perhaps being more specific, conveying a precise meaning with your words and such, would be a good idea.
Speak to me with your handsShare my beautiful language
I like this, I can feel the desperation and helplessness. I like the use of capitalization to get the point across. I do feel like you can express yourself more by expanding on this and having more visuals and using more words. Do more showing than telling.
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