The Law Student

by Prosithion

Published January 5, 2007

Back when I was teaching at Harvard, I came across a young student, who was studying for his law degree. He came up to me one day, after class, his books tucked under his arm. I looked up from my work, and waited for him to pose the question that he had obviously circulating in his mind. Why else would he have come up to my desk? After he didn’t speak for several moments, I cleared my throat, “Can I help you?”

He blinked and smiled nervously, “Yes, sorry, sir. I was wondering if you could explain to me why a lot of my father’s trials are being used as examples in the text?”

I squinted at him, and then scratched my chin, “You are James Aldberg’s son?”

“Yes, I am.”

James Aldberg was one of the greatest lawyers in the country. He was known from coast to coast for being an expensive ruthless lawyer. It was said that he only took on cases that were very hard to win. Needless to say, he never lost a case.

“Well,” I said, “I think that Mr. Aldberg is a wonderful example of how a lawyer should practice.”

James Aldberg’s son shook his head sadly, “That’s the common consensus around here?” He gestured with a derisive wave of his hand.

I nodded slowly, focusing my attention on the small goldfish bowl that was resting on my desk, “Every one here thinks that he is a wonderful lawyer. Several of the alumni met him last year. I unfortunately did not.”

“I think that you shouldn’t use him as an example.”

“What is your name?”

“Jeffery,” he said, irritably.

“Alright Jeffery,” I replied, taking off my glasses, “Why shouldn’t we use your father’s cases as an example?”

“You don’t know him like I do. I work for three years as a clerk in his law firm. I know the inside to most of his cases. He is not an example to teach by.”

“How not?”

Jeffery looked around the room nervously, “Please don’t say anything to anyone.”

I nodded, “Don’t worry. What is said in this room, stays here.”

This obviously made him feel better, because he started speaking quickly and quietly, “A lot of times, he pays off witnesses and jurors. That’s how he always wins cases. I’ve heard him discussing it with several people over the years. He also bullies people into doing what he wants.” Jeffery continued for what seemed an hour, telling of the lies, immoralities, and illegal acts of his father’s law firm.

After he finished, I sat still for several minutes, taking in everything that he said, “Are you sure?”

He nodded, “Yes.”

“Alright, thank you very much for bringing this to my attention. I’ll stop

using his cases as examples in class, because the outcomes are obviously tainted.”

Jeffery nodded, “Thanks for taking the time to listen to me, sir.”

I smiled encouragingly, “Don’t sweat it.”

Despite my confident attitude, I was nervous and felt guilty. For the last five years, I had been teaching a lot of my courses using James Aldberg as a prime example of American law. Now, I realized that James Aldberg wasn’t the shining lawyer that everyone thought. I had put countless kids into the lawyer world, with falsified information.

That evening, I sat in my living room, with a bottle of scotch, and brooded. It was dawn when I finally fell asleep. Thank God it was a Saturday.

After that year, I hadn’t seen Jeffery, but heard that he was a good and prospering lawyer.

“He is just like his father. We need more of them in the world.” I hoped that it wasn’t true.

Thirty years later, after I’d been retired for five years, I was watching TV one evening. I flicked onto the news, just as the top story began.

A withered looking news anchor smiled toothily into the camera, “Today, Jeffery Aldberg, Son of the famous lawyer, James Aldberg, was arrested at his home today. He was charged with several counts of taking bribes and lying under oath.”

I was stunned. I guess that the fruit doesn’t fall far from the tree.

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kaitlyn wrote a review Review · Aug 26, 2020

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.

First Impression: This is a pretty good story although its really unrealistic in context. Usually being unrealistic is not necessary for fantasy or sci fi but this is none of those so its just a little fake sounding. The twist at the end also just seems to be logically just not right so as a twist its just a) very predictable and b) just not the best.

Anyway let's get right to it,

Back when I was teaching at Harvard, I came across a young student, who was studying for his law degree. He came up to me one day, after class, his books tucked under his arm. I looked up from my work, and waited for him to pose the question that he had obviously circulating in his mind. Why else would he have come up to my desk? After he didn’t speak for several moments, I cleared my throat, “Can I help you?”


Okay that sounds like a decent opening. The "why else....desk" seems a little unnecessary because it is implied by the rest of the story.

“Jeffery,” he said, irritably.


Okay sudden mood change from being polite to irritated. That's unusual.

This obviously made him feel better, because he started speaking quickly and quietly, “A lot of times, he pays off witnesses and jurors. That’s how he always wins cases. I’ve heard him discussing it with several people over the years. He also bullies people into doing what he wants.” Jeffery continued for what seemed an hour, telling of the lies, immoralities, and illegal acts of his father’s law firm.


You'd think a lawyer would be more careful than allowing a clerk to listen but okay that does seem quite horrible.

Despite my confident attitude, I was nervous and felt guilty. For the last five years, I had been teaching a lot of my courses using James Aldberg as a prime example of American law. Now, I realized that James Aldberg wasn’t the shining lawyer that everyone thought. I had put countless kids into the lawyer world, with falsified information.


And a lawyer actually just believes that from one man's word. That is very hard to believe. You'd expect a lawyer to actually check all of these facts. For all her knows, Jeffrey might have made things up out of a hatred for his father.

A withered looking news anchor smiled toothily into the camera, “Today, Jeffery Aldberg, Son of the famous lawyer, James Aldberg, was arrested at his home today. He was charged with several counts of taking bribes and lying under oath.”

I was stunned. I guess that the fruit doesn’t fall far from the tree.


Aaand that feels like a very silly twist. Why would he randomly confess that and then just do exactly what he thinks was something his father did wrong. It doesn't make much logical sense to have a twist like that.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall as a story this sounds like a decent plot but I think that twist needs a lot more improvement and this other lawyer needs to at least present some proper evidence before this teacher character believes it. And that's about all the advice I have.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

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Snoink wrote a review Review · Jan 5, 2007

Mmmm.... this caught me on the front page. That takes a lot of doing. Usually I have to force myself to read, lol. But yeah. Interesting beginning that catches.

Jeffery continued for what seemed an hour, telling of the lies, immoralities, and illegal acts of his father’s law firm.


This is what we call telling, not showing. I would rather you continue the dialogue which is just so awesome-ish than to give us a narrative that doesn't fulfill.

Despite my confident attitude, I was nervous and felt guilty. For the last five years, I had been teaching a lot of my courses using James Aldberg as a prime example of American law. Now, I realized that James Aldberg wasn’t the shining lawyer that everyone thought. I had put countless kids into the lawyer world, with falsified information.

That evening, I sat in my living room, with a bottle of scotch, and brooded. It was dawn when I finally fell asleep. Thank God it was a Saturday.

After that year, I hadn’t seen Jeffery, but heard that he was a good and prospering lawyer.

“He is just like his father. We need more of them in the world.” I hoped that it wasn’t true.


This part was a little overdone and angsty. Might want to trim off the fat.

Otherwise, it was very nice indeed! :D



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