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I like this poem and the message it carries but the rhyme scheme is a confusion to me. Did you mean for it to change in the poem? Anyways, I liked it so keep on writing!
Thank you for your reviews everyone. I really appreciate it... I'll keep those tips in mind.
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this poem is beautiful. it really captures what many people feel, mostly the girls but it is magical at that because you and I both know us females are truly complicated. The poem's simplicity is wonderful, you don't go above and beyond to make your point. the words are simple and the way they are placed together is magical.
I only have a little suggestion about the line 'I seem just another girl'. I think it would be more effective if you add 'like' right in between 'seem' and 'just'. a simple word can do a lot. it will make for a more wonderful entrance. other than that I that I am enamoured!
keep up the great work! Bravo!
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great write!! I especially liked these lines:
''May be I think too much,
May be I’m not always right,
Yes, I’m closed, not forthright
but at least, I don’t judge.''
This poem exactly describes how i feel and probably alot of other girls !
I love how you took a realistic thing in society and put it in a poem so we can actually relate to it (:
i loved this and it was really good (:
Welcome to yws first off I'm not really good at reviewing poetry. Just wanted to say maybe does not have a space between it, I didn't know if it was intentional or not
This poem is so true! I liked it. Keep writing!
Sorry, I just noticed that your new after I posted my review. Just wanted to say welcome and I'm kind of new myself so high five. It was a good peice for a first post.

Well done!
I thought that this poem was very linked to today's society and how girl's must feel. You did a very good job with it and it was very deep, and like a lot of others who may read this, I could identify with the character's feelings and emotions. I just have a few little nit-picks for you.
I noticed that you used the unusual pattern of rhyming the 2nd and 3rd lines, but I'm pretty sure that 'perfect' and 'best' doesn't rhyme. Look in the thesaurus for alternative words or in the rhyming dictionary. Here are a few that I have thought of if you want to use one:
'I'm not what you expect'
'Not offered respect'
You could probably come up with better one's but you can use one of these if you like
By the way, last time I checked 'may be' was one word, right?
Also, I think it depends on your point of view but I don't think that 'right' and 'forthright' can rhyme. It's your choice whether you change it or not but because it's a compound and the last syllable is the same as the word you are rhyming it with it seems a bit repetitive.
Awesome way to end
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