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Those little things really do matter!
nice write
I really like the lines:
Thank you for your reviews, harleighblake and JRaye...
@harleighblake- I sometimes use that website, but couldn't find any satisfactory word... Still, I'll try...
@JRaye- In the second stanza, the small thing I'm pointing out is the little ray of hope, the thought of pushing a little bit more...
I liked it, it brings up a good point about the little things in life but i'm having trouble connecting the second stanza to the rest of the poem.
maybe i'm just sped, but how do the last two lines relate to the small things in life?
i don't really have any suggestions, but i'm just telling you what doesn't make sense to me.
I really like the over all setting and and the topic. It made me smile and brightened my day. I do have a problem with stanza three. You had a really great flow until I read that. A little bit of editing to make it flow would help. Try making it fit together and what not by sticking with the rhyming. I know that is difficult to do. I know of a website that helps with finding words that rhyme. I have the app actually on my iPhone it costs money but the website is free.http://www.rhymezone.com/...I hope this helps. By the way this is my first review