Young Writers Society

this was so deep i felt the anger grow as i read on and i applaud u if u are feeling this way u put it into words which is hard for some and u did a great job but if u thought this u i think u need to be a professional writer for this because thats amazing i feel like i know some background of what happened and i makes me more angry cause i feel it through the words and its kinda looking into someones mind of what they actually want to say when they r talking to someone about an ex that really left a mark

this was so deep i felt the anger grow as i read on and i applaud u if u are feeling this way u put it into words which is hard for some and u did a great job but if u thought this u i think u need to be a professional writer for this because thats amazing i feel like i know some background of what happened and i makes me more angry cause i feel it through the words and its kinda looking into someones mind of what they actually want to say when they r talking to someone about an ex that really left a mark

Hey, there! I'm Clairia, here to drop you a quick review.

This was an excellent example of what can lay behind seemingly innocent words. We all have had a time in our lives where we really want to say something to someone, but we can't. We know it'll hurt their feelings, or cause them to feel a certain way about us. I think that humans in general have a basic understanding of words' power--whether it be from personal experience or speculation--and in that understanding, we gather that we must be careful with what we say. Reading the struggle behind an attempt to be pleasant is something that I actually have only seen in literature once before. It was certainly a breath of fresh air, and it's relatable, as well.

I feel for our protagonist here, despite their rage. Though I'm in the dark about the majority of the backstory, I gathered that there was an issue with her relationship that caused her SO to "choose" the ex-friend that she's communicating with. Losing anyone special to you is a terrible, horrible experience; so I feel less pity for the potential recipient of these messages than I should. I'm not exactly sure who you wanted us to root for, but I was 100% on the main character's side.

I'd like to quickly note the font change in the final section. Was that simply to signify the increasing intensity? That's what I got from it--but I'm interested to know what your intentions were with the bold-italics.

I loved reading this. As I said earlier, this was a very relatable piece; I applaud you for speaking to sides of us that need to come to light every once in a while. We're not perfect!

Best (and thank you for sharing!)

Clairia