Chemicals

Hi there, Roxy here!

First off, I cant really tell if I like the form of this poem or not, part of me likes it and finds it alluring and creative, but the other part of me finds it difficult to read and a bit messy... hmmm... maybe keep the form, but make it run a bit smoother by moving some things around, if you know what I mean?

Secondly, I can see that any gramatical errors have already been gone through, so I wont run through them again, but just be sure to fix them up!

I like the concept of this poem and i can really feel the thought process of the author! You picked a very relatable topic, which is usually a very good idea!

You have some nice lines in this piece, for example;
"To be honest, I've never felt
like this before
everytime I see you I get butterflies
and i feel underestimated more and more."
i think that lines like these are great, and would love to see more lines like these throughout the piece!

Overall I think it was a good piece, but I think that it could be approved upon!

Keep on writing!

He-llo! Now let us get to the point...I (Ary) am here to review this piece of literary work, shall we begin?

First off, let's start with the structure. Nicely done, I can see a rhythm flowing effortlessly when I read this.

Second, grammar. You have some slight (literally they're little) errors here and there example:

"to give out this chemicals" *this* should be changed to *these*

Besides that just a few missing commas and capitalization in a few words first letters.

And lastly, but never forgotten. The meaning behind this. I think it is very relatable to readers the feelings you portray in this work. It is simply a delight to read. And well...um... I don't see anything else to extract from this lovely poem, so have a nice review day.

Hi there! I'm June.

I liked this poem. I like the opening line, "The Brain/ works in many ways", because it precedes the body of the poem with a feeling of expectation, a feeling of ways unexplored. It's a line that feeds potential to your poem, a line that could draw your readers in, and that's an exceptional quality to have on your side in poetry.

I thought a little bit about how the brain does work -- how it's part of a central station of the body that conducts impulses, responses. Triggers emotions. How it acts as the control system for what you don't even think about, and I think that this poem would be a lot better if you brought it to life by using words that draw an image, words that tie back to the brain in someway. By starting your poem off with the brain doing things, you're creating an expectation that suggests that this poem is, in some way, going to be about the brain or tie many ideas to it but the attention quickly diverts from that.

Think of a message you want to deliver to your audience, and focus your poem on delivering that message, dear. The feelings and emotions you're talking about in this poem all feel very vague; try to make the relevant and easy to relate to by elaborating a little on them.

Your rhyme scheme throughout the poem was subtle and flowed smoothly throughout the majority of the poem, so kudos to you for that. Also, whenever you finish writing something, read it to yourself aloud. It helps you determine whether or not your piece flows well, and helps you find places where you might have mis-spelled something.

But yet, sometimes we cant

Sometimes people dont really get them
but you could.

t's veery frustrating

I still ask myelf why?

Hello there here is a me with a review for you that probably will not be to big so don't get made the reason is because it is review day and I am doing as many reviews as I can for other people and such.

Hope it helps you out although it is small.

First off I think you need to put some more punctuation in but just a little more not to much.

Next is this although I think you need to put some more words in here.

You don't understand what I'm feeling
believe me,

Good job in expressing your emotions. Also, I liked how you sort of blame your reactions and feelings to the "chemicals" in your brain. Not sure if the term "chemicals" would be the most appropriate term, but I definitely understand where you are going with this. I noticed a few minor grammar errors, but other than that, I really enjoyed it. Keep writing!

Wow! This poem is amazing! I really enjoyed it. It's so true though because I know how it feels and I've been in the same situation before so I can definitely relate to it.