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Hello there, NaRachel !!!
This is Eros here with a review for your creation, "Creation".
I loved this piece of poetry. I loved how you first describe the skin, the bones, and the mouths, and then gradually comparing these things with love.
It was a unique ideaa, unique thoughts, and a unique way of explaining and describing love...
You have got creative ideas and I loved how well you were able to express them.
Now starting to delve into each and every aspect of the work.
1) The Title ...
I liked the unique title you have given to this poetry. The bones are creation, the skin is a creation and so is love, a creation.
2) The presentation ...
Just as paragraphs make it easy to understand the story, stanzas make it easy to understand a poem.
The stanzas are added perfectly and I love it.
3) The Flow ...
The flow of the poem is very smooth. Creation and addition of stanzas is not enough in a poem.
It is equally important to link those stanzas together with fine threads of ideas flowing continuoussly.
And I am glad to say that you are successful in doing this.
4) Nitpicks ...
There aren't any Nitpicks like spelling mistakes or anything that seemed improper.
5) Style of writing ...
Your style of writing the poem is very easy to understand and it helps the readers to know what they are reading.
This is a really beautiful skills to have.
Over all, I loved this piece of poetry !
It was a great work ...and I really appreciate it.
Keep writing such beautiful stuff and we would love to keep reading them !
~ Eros.
Hello there, NaRachel. In the name of the Knights of the Green Room and our Most Sacred and Tireless Quest to ensure that no works go unreviewed in the realm of the Literary Area, here I have come to free your long unreviewed piece from its state of reviewlessness on this fine Review Day. I hope you don’t mind. :3
I just wanted to commend you for your usage of "refrain" here. It's not a very common usage, and seeing "refrain" used such made me inexplicably happy.
Now, the one thing that this poem would greatly benefit from is punctuation. Yes, yes, not all poetry needs punctuation, but this poem really has no reason to not have punctuation, and having punctuation would really add more clarity to this piece. As it stands, a lot of the lines and ideas run into each other like muddy colors, and there's no reason for it as the colors aren't combining into new hues but more an icky brown.
Otherwise, for the most part, I liked how you handled your rhyming. Near the end, it began to feel a bit forced, but the first two stanzas were really nice, especially with how you blended the rhyming seamlessly with the not rhyming.
Wow...didn't think this one would ever get reviewed! Thanks for your help