Hi, Murmurations!
I'm back on this lovely Review Day!
Yup! This is definitely the second installment. xD And it's kinda weird, but I like it in that weird way. It's unique!
I don't know what a curandera is, so that would've been fun to elaborate on. But I guess Google is all the same.
The instructions are kind of goofy. I don't get how taking sin back lessens the burden. In fact, that should weigh the person down a lot more. Taking the son back might metaphorically help, kind of like filling in a whole in your heart. But taking your sin back? What? xD That hurt me.
I don't understand why the jar is being put underwater--or wait. Maybe it wasn't closed. Never mind! (Well, clarification wouldn't hurt.)
I don't think the instructions were very clear. Because, um, from the reader's standpoint, the lady never said to drink it. And I should think there's an explanation for having to go only ankle-deep and not knee-deep or toe-deep. That seems rather specific. Why do they have to feel the sand, too? I mean, it seems like they'd no the beach. I imagine the lady just wants the MC to feel a connection with nature or something, but this seems way more crazy than peaceful.
Sssso the instructions were weird, and I didn't know what to think of them.
The whole ritual thing is cool, and at least I could tell this was a second installment from Act 1! I like how you described the birds in the first paragraph, too.
I think I'd have liked just a little more elaboration on this. I feel like I've just been shoved out of this story. I'm not really following anymore. I don't know what's going on or who the good guy is. It's kind of depressing. xD I'm not hooked anymore.
You have such a cool idea though, so try out a different style? Something that would help reinforce the point of this story better. The last thing you want to do is lose readers!
Keep writing!
Jabber, the One and Only!
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