Shadow that isn’t hers

Hi @Shikora here with a review.
I really liked this poem. It was very enchanting. But there is somethings I would like to fix for you.

I have taken what you have said, and I'm going to add a few things that will make a big difference.
(How does she stay?

Draining all her soul away.

You can see it in her eyes.

The towering man has her hypnotized.

Following the summer breeze,

she could float away with ease

Oh the gale roars through the night.

All her demons come to bite.

Not a soul she could tell.

Her lips sewn like a spell.

Keeping someone from turning the key.

Being able to set her free.

Never would she go.

Leave her mothers suffering to grow.

So there she sits.)

That is all I could see wrong with it It just needed full stops at the ends. I really liked the way you rimed the words, To me this is a work of art. Well done, I hope to see more of your work soon. Have a good day.

Your friend @Shikora. Happy review day.

Nothing but a candle lit

Praying to a God that doesn’t exist)

Hi there @MrGrey I am here to do a review on you poem, fist thing is this is a good length, How does she stay, I am not really shore what you mean by this, Draining all her soul away, what do you mean by this, I bet you could put a little bit more of feeling into it,
spot the difronse,
What you have said, You can see it in her eyes, what I have said, You can see it in her sweet dancing eyes, I just think that this brings a bit more feeling into it, Her lips sewn like a spell, nise riming, but it needs a little work with this line I am shore if you worked horred at it, you would find what you need to fikes this line a bit more, Keeping someone from turning the key, that last word feels like the akshol computer key, try your hadest to think of what you could put in that spas, the rest was all good, if you don't want to take my ad vise that is fine with me, keep up on the good work,

@EagleFly out to seek and kill