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The Sleeping Beauty Sonnet

by Morgan


The three fairies that loved and cared for me,

But then suddenly turned my world around.

Yet they softened the curse that was to be

That placed my splintered heart into the ground.

A sleep like death, awakened by a kiss.

To find true love on my sixteenth birthday.

To be awakened with my prince in bliss.

The moment my heart will fly on that day.

When I touch the spinning wheel at sunset,

I know I will fall into a deep sleep.

Nothing they can do, even if they tried.

A witch’s curse that she will want to keep.

I will do and fall into a deep slumber

Even though I will go through such pain,

My kingdom will no longer be in vain


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Thu Mar 14, 2019 2:36 am
OofOof1 wrote a review...



This is amazing. This all reminds me of the Sleeping Beauty movie itself. If your poem was based on Sleeping Beauty that you did a good job, in fact a great job, making this poem. Now I would suggest at the end of your poem you put a period at the end of your last line.

That said, I felt like some of the periods in your poem where it supposed to go with the Lines. Maybe, if your OCD says that you have to put something after the lines then put some commas there instead.

(FYI, OCD is like when you really have to do something even though you're not supposed to do it, or even though you don't have to do it)

Anyway, great job. I can't wait to read more from you.




Morgan says...


Thank you for the review and I%u2019m pleased to hear that you enjoyed this poem!!!



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Thu Mar 14, 2019 12:57 am
JadeLotus wrote a review...



This was awesome! It made sense, rhymed, and was good. It flowed but wasn't too flowey, if that makes sense. Keep up the good work. I really don't have any suggestions other than:
A sleep like death, awakened by a kiss.

To find true love on my sixteenth birthday.

To be awakened with my prince in bliss.

To be honest, that sounds like the back of an action book.

WILL SLEEPING BEAUTY FIND HER TRUE LOVE ON HER SWEET SIXTEENTH?

TO BE AWAKENED?
A PRINCE'S BLISS???

I'm sorry. I couldn't help it.
Overall: Keep up the good work!

Your friend,
Jade :)




Morgan says...


Lol..thank you. I%u2019m glad that You liked it.




All truly wise thoughts have been thought already thousands of times; but to make them truly ours, we must think them over again honestly, till they take root in our personal experience.
— Johann Wolfgang von Goethe