My Cure

I love this poem, happy review day! This poem has one message, but many meanings. It is so beautiful and very intriguing. The works seemed to have a furtive sense to it, but very emotional. The word choice made it have a nice flow, making it even more enjoyable to read. I hope I can read more of your works, and thanks for er.... Listening? (Reading). Happy review day and keep writing!
-molly

Hello, I am SecreteJournalist, but feel free to call me Brie I am definitely ready to review ! I havnt done this in a while, but I am going to review stanza by stanza!



Your a poisonous addiction I've become hooked on.

It feels so damn good as you flow through me.

Seeing your face makes my heart race,

And its ecstasy.

Until the pain sets in my brain.

Then my heart blackens and implodes,

And my fortress of a mind corrodes.

The feelings are back.

Pain, Cheated, Confused

Fuck.

I like this stanza immensely, it really opens up an captures the readers full attention. The description is well, the spelling is well, the grammar is well, it's really nice Good Job so far!




As I look for a place to hide

Your cold, constricting arms are all i find.

While you squeeze the life from me,

My mind is overloaded with acidic memories.


This line intrigues me, I feel intent to read this over and over again. Only thing I find wrong, is that you forgot to capitalize the 'i' .. but either than that, great!!!!!!!!!!!!!




I pass out.

I pass out seems a wee bit too simple for a poem such as this, maybe try an alternative? Or just a synonym for passing out would work ;o


When I wake Im in the arms of a different woman.

A woman i beleive could be my cure

To your disgusting disease.


I do find a few errors in this, I suspect they are typos! Fix Im to 'I'm' , capitalize the 'i' and spell beleive as 'believe' and this will be a perfect poem!

Overall, I liked the idea and emotion, and with a wee bit of fixing up, this poem will be perfect! Great job, keep writing!

Sincerely,
SecreteJournalist
AKA
Brie