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In Antas Forest Part 1 - Travelers Two

by Messenger

Published February 9, 2025

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In Short Stories

PART 1

Titus glanced behind. Mist and shadow drenched the lush forest, concealing his tracks beneath a layer of heather and fern. Each step took him deeper into the woods, and farther away from his problems. At least, that’s what he told himself.

“Someone after you?”

That was his traveling companion, Arlene. She hadn’t said much - and he even less - for the first day and a half, but she seemed determined to break that pattern.

“No,” he said. He ran a hand through his neck-length salt-pepper hair and absentmindedly scratched at his two-day stubble.

“Then why do you look back so often?” She wasn’t argumentative with the question, but that didn’t make it any less annoying.

“No reason,” he said.

Arlene picked up a twig from the ground and began peeling away the bark to reveal green wood beneath.

“There’s always a reason.”

“It’s none of your concern,” Titus said.

“For instance,” Arlene continued like he hadn’t even spoken, “I chose to travel with you, a complete stranger, in these woods, because I find it safer than going alone.”

“You had no way of knowing if I was safer than the alternative. I could be a murderer, thief, ruffian.”

“If you were a murderer, you would’ve killed me long ago. If you were a thief, you picked a sorry soul to be the object of your thieving, and if you are a ruffian you are the most shy and bashful one I’ve ever encountered.”

“You’ve encountered many?” Titus kicked himself the moment he asked the question. He didn’t need or want for this conversation to go on.

Arlene brushed aside a swath of auburn hair and looked his direction for the first time. Her fair skin was moist with mist and her green eyes blended into the folds of foliage behind her. “I am a pretty woman who grew of in Lovrikane. I’ve had more than my fair share of men and women wanting everything on my person, and my person itself.”

“You seemed to have managed alright,” he replied gruffly. “How old are you, anyway?”

She tsked at that. “What a forward question. I’ll trade ya?”

“Forget I asked,” he sighed.

She put a pointed finger on her equally pointy chin. “Let me guess: greying hair, strong build, weathered skin, rough hands from sone sort of arduous task. Your eyes and your gait are lively though, like they have some youth to them still. Life has aged you faster than time. I’d say thirty-four, forty at most.”

“Close enough,” he said. Her observance was not that of a common fool. She had been taking an account of him for the past day. He could not say the same.

“I’ll accept that, for the time being,” she winked. “And for the sake of fairness, I myself am just shy of twenty-eight.” She tossed aside the twig she had been de-barking. “Where are ya headed? And don’t say west again.”

She beat him by half a second. His gaze fell to his leather boots. “Brunehaven.”

“Brunehaven? I’ve never even heard of that.”

“Well, it’s real,” he said, sighing with exasperation.

“I myself am headed to the great city of Genevuh. There’s said to be endless opportunities on the Glass Coast. Any person with skill is sure to find a living. Maybe I’ll work for the mayor himself, or perhaps I’ll settle into some sort of more menial work, like a dock worker or seamstress.”

Titus said nothing. She didn’t look to have the brawn necessary for a dock worker, nor the temperament of a quiet seamstress, but working for the mayor could suit her well. She was plenty meddlesome but had an air of buoyancy that she hid behind. With her charming looks and bubbly persona she could fool many a commoner. And she was still talking.

“From your looks I’d guess you work quite hard with your hands. Lumberjack? Stone mason? Surely with those big arms you could hoist those pieces of granite without breaking a sweat.”

Titus grunted. It was meant to signal the end of the conversation, but to Arlene it meant to commence with another line of questioning. He wasn’t sure why she was so chatty all of a sudden. Even the birds had hidden away as she plowed through the undergrowth with no regard for tranquility, her long red dress snagging on thorns, wet leaves, and fallen timber, but she paid them no mind.

“Where do you come from? That could give me some inclination. I know you aren’t from Farris Station. Pretty sure no one lives there but the livery boys and the correspondence station workers, and you certainly aren’t a desk clerk or scrawny street urchin.”

A headache was beginning to form. Titus squeezed his temples. “Why does it matter? Why are you so interested? In a few days we’ll never see each other again. The only important thing is getting through Antas Forest. And if you don’t pipe down you just might get to meet a murderer, thief and ruffian altogether at once! Wouldn’t that be something?” He shot her a most sarcastic smile.

She puffed her cheeks and shoved her hands in her dress pockets. “Just making conversation. Been traveling alone for a while. Started to go a little stir-crazy.”

“Stir it somewhere else, hmm?” That seemed to finally silence her.

~ ~ ~ ~ ~

Antas Forest was dark in the day, with great canopies blocking out most of the light, and darkwood and shadowy foliage absorbing the rest. That is, when a ghostly mist wasn’t rolling through the damp woods. For this reason, Titus and Arlene had stopped to make camp well before the usual time, to make sure they had ample firewood for the night. Titus didn’t believe in ghost stories, but he did believe in wildcats, dire wolves, and night bats.

Now they sat before a fire opposite each other. The flames tried their best to drag his mind back to his hometown, the cevin cats crying in the trees joined in the attempt, but he blocked them out. He couldn’t revisit those thoughts, lest they envelop flame and bring on the darkness again.

Titus had kept it on the smaller side, not wanting any unseen eyes to note their presence, and although he sensed disagreement from Arlene’s pensive presence, she said nothing. That is until after they had eaten from their respective rations. Titus ate nothing more than a bit of dried meat, but Arlene gorged on fresh apples, plums, and some bread that she washed down with a berry mead. Titus sipped from his canteen of water.

Her inquisitive voice broke the cadence of owls hooting and fire popping. “Do you believe the stories? Of the forest, I mean. The dark figures in cloaks, the Woman in Green, the walking riverboat?”

“No.”

“But you have heard of them?”

“Hasn’t everyone?”

“That’s a good question,” she said.

“Not really,” he growled.

“Why not?”

Titus sighed and capped his canteen. “Why does it matter if I’ve heard of them? It only matters if you believe them, and I do not.”

“You have no belief in the supernatural, then?” She leaned forward, crunching on an apple.

Titus leaned back on the log he had been using for a chair. “I believe in what I can see before me. I don’t have time for the rest.” But he did hope there was a supernatural. He couldn’t bear the thought of the consequences otherwise.

“You’ve got more important things to attend to. In Brunehaven?”

“Yes,” he hissed.

“I don’t believe you,” she said, not a shred of malice in her voice. But it was full of confidence.

“Why not? Not that I care.”

She chuckled, a merry sound that rang out against the aged and massive darkwood trees. It was beautiful if you knew its origin, but one that might be haunting out in these woods at night if you were a lonesome traveler.

“If you didn’t care, you needn’t let me know. If you had such high prospects in Brunehaven you would have shared them by now. No man with a hopeful future would carry himself such as you do.”

“Perhaps I am sworn to secrecy.”

“That would make you even more intriguing,” she said, rising and coming round the fire to his side. She sat on the log beside him, causing him to shift on the dewy ground farther to the right. He could smell the berry mead on her lips.

“It would make you quite a nuisance,” he said. Not that she wasn’t already, but he thought this may pass along the message without stinging quite as much.

“It would make me a woman,” she said.

“What does that mean?”

“It means, that if we didn’t ask the questions, we wouldn’t get any answers most of the time. You all act so brooding and commandeering.”

“If I’m such a bothersome traveling companion you could move on,” Titus offered. He was beginning to feel fatigued from the journey and his brain was tired of her wordplay and incessant curiosity.

“Not when you’ve been such a good sport. Besides, you seem lonely.”

“I don’t mind being alone,” he lied.

“No family then?”

“What?”

“You prefer only the company of yourself.”

“That isn’t what I said.”

She sank to the ground beside him, inches away. “Then you do have a family?”

“That is none of your concern,” Titus said, standing abruptly and wiping the back of his pants off. He tossed a few logs onto the fire and watched the dancing sparks fight for the sky, only to dissolve.

“You had a family,” she said. This time her voice was soft, almost as if talking to herself.

Chills ran down his spine as heat rose up his cheeks. His heart was thudding against his chest in an instant, and he fought a wave of memories that tried to crash upon the shores of his mind. She had no right to know his pain, and he did not want to deal with it right now.

“Is that why you are going to Brunehaven? Why you left your home?”

He spun on his heels, leering down at her. “My business is my own! Why must you badger me? Have you no regard for my sanity or serenity?”

Arlene’s eyes sank. She stood slowly, fingers picking at each other. Titus was huffing at this point, trying to contain the storm within. She looked up at last, gently taking his wrist in both her arms.

“I am sorry. You’re right. I’ve been a trampling boar.” She let go of his wrist. “Perhaps I should just leave.”

She stepped away and gathered her travel bag.

“What are you doing?” Titus asked, hands on his hips. His breathing had steadied a bit.

“I have overstayed my welcome as a travel companion. I’ll see myself to Genevuh.”

“Don’t be ridiculous.” Titus stepped toward her. “You can’t travel in these woods at night. Forget your bedtime ghost stories, you’ll not be able to see where you’re going, and there are very real threats in these woods. Stay the night, at least. Let us think upon this in the morning with clear heads.”

A hint of a smile spread across her cherry lips. “Very well. Still, I shall remain silent as the grave.” She tossed her knapsack on the ground and Titus turned to make his bed for the night. “I often talk to myself, you know?” She plopped onto the ground. “It is a way in which I don’t lose my head in the clouds. Haven’t been able to do such with you beside me.”

Titus spread out his threadbare blanket and made a pillow of sorts with his travel sack. He rested his head on it with his hands clasped behind his head and closed his eyes.

“I suppose it brings me some comfort, not letting it fester inside. My mother never spoke much, then would act in the most rash manner, and I believe it to be a symptom of hiding it all insi-“

“Arlene.”

“Yes?”

“Do you know what the phrase ‘silent as the grave’ means?”

His eyes remined closed but he could almost detect the blush. “Yes. Sorry.” There was a moment of silence. “Goodnight.”

Titus wasn’t sure if he muttered a reply before he dozed off. What was crystal clear is that when he awoke out of a dead sleep in the middle of the night, Arlene was gone, her travel gear undisturbed, and the fire had died down to smoldering embers, but the sky was still black as tar. 

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Ravena wrote a review Review · Jun 15, 2025

Hello, My Friend!

Hello, Messenger! It’s me, Raven, finally catching up to this piece in my queue! That said, I’ll be reviewing this short story today, using my Familiar method! Let’s dive right in, shall we?

What The Black Eyes See
~ A full analysis and breakdown


Oh wow, this was awesome! I love this setup for your main character and his follower; the aged, bitter, long-experienced (for better or worse) man with the task of escorting a young, chatty girl through a creepy and dangerous region. It's giving "Joel and Ellie" vibes, if...Ellie was more obnoxious XD Let's get into the details though.

Plot and Pacing: Great! I did love the medieval/fantasy aesthetic, and I felt that the "horror" aspect was more subtle yet very sweet—building up slowly, mainly through the environment and the mystery surrounding this main character, then it all REALLY pays off with such a mysterious ending!!

Descriptions and Setting: Lovely! I loved your detailing of the dark, misty environment, and how dark the place can be even in the day. You also did a great job capturing Titus's inner thoughts and his pessimistic tone in the narration. Although, I do back what Cupid said about color detailing and sensory notes—like, these setting descriptions are gorgeous as-is, with those recs they would just sparkle~

Characterization: As...persistent as Arlene was with the questions, I can't really blame her! I was absolutely fascinated by the mystery surrounding Titus. Not only did it work with the plot, drawing attention to his character so we assume Arlene is the normal one here, but it kept me wondering. Will it turn out that he really is one of the ruffians or murderers that he warned Arlene about, or worse? What is he hiding in his past, and could it be something to hint at an ulterior motive? I mean, the latter I could still stand by technically; perhaps some guilt over the loss of his family could be driving him to protect this innocent girl in her quest...But of course, that's just what I can theorize/interpret based on what we have in this story~

As for Arlene, wow! I thought her character stood out, with her keen observations and persistent questioning. Likewise, the buildup we got, with her talking about these big ambitions in the city, working for the mayor, really made her sudden disappearance all the more devastating. Like, I don't know what I was expecting from this girl, but I was not expecting that! And the vague clues do make for some lovely theory material...

Grammar and Wording: Looks good to me! Nothing to remark on here.

Where The Dagger Points
~ Some nitpicks and little recommendations


This is normally where I stick more specific, tiny nitpicks that don't fit in the breakdown, like typos and such. However, since Vamp caught that "grew of" one, I don't have any to put here. Great writing job!

Why The Grin Widened
~ My reactions, theories, and favorite parts


Oh my gosh, the theory potential here! Arlene's disappearance leaves my head spinning. I mean, she could have just left, but why leave her belongings then? She could have been taken by somebody, but wouldn't Titus have heard a struggle? Or, most mysteriously of all...could Arlene have been (or been accosted by) something paranormal or supernatural? As/by an entity trapped within these woods? I do see a "Part 2" to this story, so I'm sure there could be a rational explanation...maybe...

*ahem* Okay, and now onto some highlights and reactions, for fun and to just show what stood out as I read!

Titus glanced behind. Mist and shadow drenched the lush forest, concealing his tracks beneath a layer of heather and fern. Each step took him deeper into the woods, and farther away from his problems. At least, that’s what he told himself.


I loved how this story opened! Not only are the details so lovely, immediately painting us a picture of this mysterious place, but looping them into Titus's perspective—this idea of stepping away from his problems...Right off the back, we get a feeling of mystery and intrigue for this guy.

Arlene brushed aside a swath of auburn hair and looked his direction for the first time. Her fair skin was moist with mist and her green eyes blended into the folds of foliage behind her. “I am a pretty woman who grew of in Lovrikane. I’ve had more than my fair share of men and women wanting everything on my person, and my person itself.”


Points for character design! It sounds like Arlene's had her own fair share of experience (for better or worse), and in hindsight, it makes you fear it may be foreshadowing. I mean, her saying this and then disappearing?? Definitely leads you to fear the possibilities, and generates more interest in Part 2 (it also fueled my "paranormal" theory, I won't lie lol).

“From your looks I’d guess you work quite hard with your hands. Lumberjack? Stone mason? Surely with those big arms you could hoist those pieces of granite without breaking a sweat.”

Titus grunted. It was meant to signal the end of the conversation, but to Arlene it meant to commence with another line of questioning.


Hehe, I love how you decided to withhold what Titus's job is, or details about his home. Sure, you COULD take it in a "painful memories from an innocent guy" way, but you could also take it as a "if I tell her, she'll probably run or catch onto my plot," or something like that way...More mystery >.>

“You have no belief in the supernatural, then?” She leaned forward, crunching on an apple.


(00 ) This feels like another hint, and makes me both nervous and excited to read more about this forest. Spooky...

“You had a family,” she said. This time her voice was soft, almost as if talking to herself.

Chills ran down his spine as heat rose up his cheeks. His heart was thudding against his chest in an instant, and he fought a wave of memories that tried to crash upon the shores of his mind. She had no right to know his pain, and he did not want to deal with it right now.


This moment was amazing! The emphasis on Arlene switching her words to had a family, followed by this great description of Titus combating the emotional weight it brings...Ugh, that was like a tug at the heartstrings. Really nailed the revelation here.

“Arlene.”

“Yes?”

“Do you know what the phrase ‘silent as the grave’ means?”


The touch of humor here was very nice, I found myself chuckling at this lol.

Our Mad Thoughts...


Overall, I really loved that short story, and I would love to check out Part 2 if you would like some reviews for it too! Nicely done! :D


Thus concludes my review. To leave off, here are some inspiring quotes, courtesy of your resident Poe freak ~

"They who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night."
"Words have no power to impress the mind without the exquisite horror of their reality.”
"I would define, in brief, the poetry of words as the rhythmical creation of Beauty."

I would love to hear your thoughts on part 2 and 3!

Ravena replied · Jun 15, 2025

Awesome! I'll check them out soon! :D

creeperfeverdreams wrote a review Review · Feb 11, 2025

Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the scary S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - Titus wants to get out of Antas forest as quickly as he can, especially to get away from Arlene, who is much too happy and unbothered in his company. Arlene doesn’t seem to care, though. She’s just grateful for his company…so why did she just disappear so suddenly? Hmm…

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - If it was intentional for you to say “Grew of” for Arlene growing up in Lovrikane instead of “grew up”, then please ignore this.

Chocolate Bar - I love how you described the forest and the differences between Arlene and Titus! Titus seems to have a dark past and that affects how he talks to Arlene, but then, Arlene herself must have had an unfavorable past and just wants to combat that by talking and being as cheery as possible. Another thing I’ve really enjoyed is how Arlene wants to analyze Titus because she’s curious about him. She’s probably never met someone like him before. Also, I liked how she disappeared right when Titus woke up…hints that maybe, just maybe…she’s more than what she lets on.

Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, I think that this is a very intriguing first chapter of a spooky story, I’ll be sure to check out the other two chapters. Arlene is my favorite character so far because of her positivity in such a dark, daunting place, but I’m sure that she has other plans that she’s not telling Titus about…but I don’t know them…not yet…and so, I now leave off with:

I wish you a magnificent day/night! ^v^

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Youbeaucupid wrote a review Review · Feb 9, 2025

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Introduction:


SWOOSH! Greetings, lovely Messenger! Cupid here, armed with my bow, arrow, and a sprinkle of stardust for a reviewing adventure! Today, I'm diving into the captivating world of reviews with my very own Cupid's Sweetheart Spotlight. It's like the incredible YWS S'more Method, but with a dash of Cupid's magic! Let's get flying, shall we? :D


Fluttering Wings - Initial Impressions:

Wow, Messenger, just from this first part, I'm already loving this story! I was immediately drawn into the mysterious world you've created! The dialogue between Titus and Arlene is sharp and witty, and I enjoy how you slowly introduce bits and pieces of their personalities and backstories. The descriptions of the forest are vivid and atmospheric, which really sets the mood for this story! I'm already hooked and eager to know what happens next!!

Arrow Adjustments - Loving Suggestions:

Since we're on the topic of atmosphere, one thing I noticed is that sometimes the descriptions could be a bit more vivid. For example, when you describe Arlene's eyes as "green," you could add more detail to make them stand out more. Perhaps something like "emerald green" or "forest green." Little details like that can make a big difference when your readers try to imagine what your characters look like!

There are so many ways to bring your story to life, and a good way to do that is through imagery! When you describe the forest, try using more sensory details to bring it to life! What does it smell like? What sounds do you hear? What does the mist feel like on your skin? You could also include more details about the specific location in Antas Forest. Are there any unique features surrounding it? Is it near a river or a mountain?

Show me the sights, sounds, and smells of your world, and let my imagination run wild! Remember, storytelling is all about taking risks, pushing boundaries, and pouring your heart and soul onto the page!!

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(Of course, these are just suggestions for the future! Feel free to disregard my opinion however you wish! But overall, this chapter of your novel was amazingg!! :))


Cherished Verses - Cupid's Favorite Lines:

“It means, that if we didn’t ask the questions, we wouldn’t get any answers most of the time. You all act so brooding and commandeering.”


Yes, Arlene! Call him out! I love how she just says what everyone else is too afraid to. It’s such a great reminder that sometimes you have to push back, even when it’s uncomfortable. (So far, Arlene is a personal favorite, not to be biased towards characters, keke~!)

"If you were a murderer, you would’ve killed me long ago. If you were a thief, you picked a sorry soul to be the object of your thieving, and if you are a ruffian you are the most shy and bashful one I’ve ever encountered."


Oooh, this line is so good! I love your word choices, something about the way you wrote this is so satisfying to read! Arlene’s wit is sharp, and I love how she just sees right through Titus’s tough act.

"Life has aged you faster than time. I’d say thirty-four, forty at most.”


Okay, I have to say, I'm quite curious about what Titus has been through. What kind of life has Titus lived all these years? Will we get a backstory, does he has a dark past?? There is so much I'd like to know about him and his past! (You'll have to let me know when the second chapter is out, or I'll go absolutely mad, haha!!)

Final Whispers - Closing Thoughts:

Overall, Messenger, your story is wonderful! The characters are well-developed, the plot is clearly well thought out, and the writing is engaging! Wishing you the best as you continue writing—I can’t wait to see where this goes next!! :D

Sending you all my love in heart-shaped arrows, Cupid!

Thank you Cupid! You made some good points about the atmosphere and mood. I went ahead and posted the 2nd and last part whenever you have time to check them out!

Glad I could give some advice! Also, I'll make sure to check those out when I get a chance, Messenger! ^^



If I seem to wander, if I seem to stray, remember that true stories seldom take the straightest way.
— Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind