Young Writers Society

This is my first time reviewing a poem and in this site. Therefore, everything I say from this point on is completely my thoughts and opinions, so take everything I type with a grain of salt.

First of all, I like how this is short and simple; nothing very complicated. To me, the poem described the essence of rain, the wonder of the snow, and an imaginary life with the clouds. Although it's a good poem, I can't help but feel that some kind of impact is missing.

"When it rains,
The world comes to life."

Nice introduction. I like how it's worded out. Because rain is actually essential to humanity in many ways. Drought has killed a lot of people.

"A vibrant green sustains
As foliage grows without advice."

This is a good way to describe leaves and plants. Thumbs up!

Good Morning/Evening/Night!

Wow! That was such a good poem! I love the theme and feeling of freedom the poem entails. My favorite line was the repeated

“Oh, how I wonder how it feels to fly/To sit on a cloud/Up in the sky”

The only thing I would change, would be in the lines

“When it snows/There’s wonder and magic/The wind continues to blow/With a cold, peaceful and quiet.”

The words magic, and quite don’t rhyme. But in all the other stanzas, the second and last line rhyme, or have something very close.

Other than that, it was a great poem, and I hope to see more of your work around!

Happy writing!

-Lizzy