Published February 8, 2011
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I love the way it actually speaks to you when you read it. This really does belong in lyric form and in that form this could be really amazing. If you convert this to lyric form it would be quite amazing.
Very "Boxer" esque. But not, sort of. I want to see this as lyrics, changed to fit the standards of a song. Interesting in all Bolshevik.
Woo! Going kind of Simon and Garfunkel there, aren't you? Reminiscent of "The Boxer"!
Anyway, I think this would be a lot spiffier in the Lyrics forum, since you could totally get away with all the Lalas there, plus it would completely fit! Anyway, if you want me to move this, just bug me. 