Hi! Here's a brief review for you:
The poem felt like a punch in my gut. And yes, that's a good thing! This piece feels very close to my experience so I found it inspiring, powerful and relatable.
I got a little lost in the last verse, I'm a bit confused with the wording "all of time". I guess it's connected with the "far away time" of verse two, but I think it's not very clear. Were you trying to say that someday you'll loose the respect you have for yourself?
I feel like this verse needs to be a little retouched, because it breaks the strong impact of the rest of this beautiful poem.
The title is very smart and catchy!
Please consider that's just my personal opinion, and I think you wrote an amazing piece.
Points: 930
Reviews: 28
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