And like no other
I see through her like air
Sycophantic
Egotistic
Manipulative
Brilliant
She's brilliant
Masquerading her venomous lies so flawlessly that they taste like honey
Cold lifeless eyes like that of a shark
And like a shark
She smells blood before she sees it
And preys on weaknesses an insecurities
She wouldn't dare call herself an atheist
because she feels like a deity
I can't reveal that I abhor her uncouth ways
For my sanity would be called into question
She makes me sick
And I can't stand to look at her anymore
I turn my face away from the mirror
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This is a wonderful poem. The mystery, the choice of words ... it all adds to the feeling of this piece.
Your grammar and spelling was great.
I like it especially that you vary the length of your lines. Sometines only using one word. This supports the meaning and importance of these words.
And the last line was perfect.
Keep it up!
Whoa man! Seems like who have a rough business with this "brilliant girl." It reminds me of Alison De Laurentis in pretty little liars. She seems like a manipulative person. You totally brought out her character for which you definitely need to be praised. This seems to be like your outlet for anger on someone. Anyways...coming back to poem. Nice use of words. It didnt went bland even for a second. And the last line turned the tables. "The girl in the mirror" Nice introspection.
I enjoyed the mystery of who the writer is directing the poems towards and how all in unveiled in the last sentence. Great use of simile's.
I think the abstraction is a little overkill. But hey, I felt the rage of the speaker. I almost had to stop reading to take a breath!
Hey there, its Huda for a review.
Skimming through the poem, i found it perfect in terms of spellings and grammar.
'And preys on weaknesses an insecurities'. It should be 'and'. I consider it was a typo.
Well, I love the whole idea of this poem. Your words first deceive the reader and the last line actually reveals what the basic idea is. That is totally perfect! I mean, I was stunned at the last line. The descriptions are very good, they make a vivid image in the readers mind and most importantly, they intensify your idea. I appreciate your choice of words, they seem to add up to your idea. You seem to take all in your grace. I loved the poem. I'll be looking forward to read more from you.Keep writing!
Hey there, its Huda for a review.
Skimming through the poem, i found it perfect in terms of spellings and grammar.
'And preys on weaknesses an insecurities'. It should be 'and'. I consider it was a typo.
Well, I love the whole idea of this poem. Your words first deceive the reader and the last line actually reveals what the basic idea is. That is totally perfect! I mean, I was stunned at the last line. The descriptions are very good, they make a vivid image in the readers mind and most importantly, they intensify your idea. I appreciate your choice of words, they seem to add up to your idea. You seem to take all in your grace. I loved the poem. I'll be looking forward to read more from you.Keep writing!