Project God

by Lilac_Wood

Published September 25, 2005

I post this more as a little more background on the story blurb "Passcode" than anything else. Questions, comments, suggestions welcome! (So is prodding.)

“I don’t get it,” Michelangelo said simply, shaking his head. “Born a god.”

Jared nodded. “My father is Set, Egyptian God of Chaos. My mother was human. I have a brother, Joel, and a sister, Gwen. They’re great, but they didn’t know what they were. They weren’t raised among gods.”

“Born a god,” Michelangelo repeated.

“And you’re a scientific experiment,” Jared said. “Runaway project. You and the baby.”

Michelangelo nodded. “I’m first-generation. This is Gaea, a third-gen.”

Jared grinned. “Top secret government organization.”

“It won’t be top secret much longer,” Michelangelo said surely. “The scientists who let us first-gens escape with forty babies have started a revolution of sorts. It’s going world-wide. Everyone will know about the project and the ‘dangerous’ gods by tomorrow.”

“New Gods,” Jared said quietly. “I can pick up on your aura. It’s definitely godly, but it’s... different. Younger. The Old Gods, I’m not sure how they’ll react to this development.”

The two young men, Jared and Michelangelo, sat across from each other at a little booth in a little diner, Michelangelo with a newborn babe in his arms. He was holding her so tenderly. Every time he glanced at the baby, he first relaxed then searched the diner for anything suspicious.

Jared watched this stranger with great interest. The red-haired Demigod of Chaos had never seen anything like this. He understood demigods and full gods and creatures of myth, but a human clone straight from the land of science fiction was completely new to him. It had been a total coincidence when Jared recognized this fellow “god” and introduced himself as a demigod, too. That had brought them to this quiet little diner, and eventually to this lull in conversation.

“What do you plan to do?” Jared asked suddenly. Gwen’d kill him if he didn’t extend the helping hand of friendship.

Michelangelo shook his head. “I’ve heard about this world, but I’ve never been in it before. I have no idea what to do now, and the scientist who helped me could do no more than set me free.”

“You’re lucky you ran into me, then,” Jared said. “I’ll take you to my dad. We’ve already got one dangerous child god in our care. What’s two dangerous child gods plus a refugee New God?”

“You keep calling me that,” Michelangelo said. “Why?”

“It seems to fit,” Jared answered with a shrug. “Plus Michelangelo is so long.”

“I usually get called Angel because of my power,” he said.

“Wings,” Jared guessed.

“Wings,” Angel confirmed. He realized something suddenly. “You said you’d take me to your dad. He’s Set, an Egyptian God?”

“Yes, exactly,” Jared said.

Angel just shook his head. “So weird... And what was that about a dangerous child god?”

“My dad has been entrusted to care for this little demigoddess with the touch of death,” Jared answered. “Her name is Omorose, but we call her Rose. She’s about seven now.”

He Demigod of Chaos stood from he table then, laying down a few bills to pay for the greasy burgers the two had ordered. He started to just walk away from the table, but stopped when he noticed Angel’s delay.

“Well?” Jared asked.

“Old Gods, New Gods, Project God,” he said, standing slowly. Gaea had fallen asleep, and he didn’t want to disturb her. “Altogether too many gods in this world. There’s going to be trouble.”

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kaitlyn wrote a review Review · Aug 1, 2020

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.

First Impression: This was a pretty nice little piece. Definitely intriguing. And this "Passcode" sounds really interesting if this has to do with the blurb of it. Its pretty well done except maybe....a little bit too much explaining goes on here in my opinion. (The explanations are great don't get me wrong but it feels like maybe just a bit too much information)

Anyway let's get right to it,

Jared nodded. “My father is Set, Egyptian God of Chaos. My mother was human. I have a brother, Joel, and a sister, Gwen. They’re great, but they didn’t know what they were. They weren’t raised among gods.”


Instantly this is a very neat way to open....although the answer appears to be a tad bit...convenient. Like why would he talk off his entire family there.

“Born a god,” Michelangelo repeated.

“And you’re a scientific experiment,” Jared said. “Runaway project. You and the baby.”

Michelangelo nodded. “I’m first-generation. This is Gaea, a third-gen.”

Jared grinned. “Top secret government organization.”


This part of the exposition is totally fine. Its natural enough and tells us what we need to know. So more of this is the way to go.

Jared watched this stranger with great interest. The red-haired Demigod of Chaos had never seen anything like this. He understood demigods and full gods and creatures of myth, but a human clone straight from the land of science fiction was completely new to him. It had been a total coincidence when Jared recognized this fellow “god” and introduced himself as a demigod, too. That had brought them to this quiet little diner, and eventually to this lull in conversation.


Okay...this is excusable but its teetering on the line of too much "narration" almost.

“Wings,” Jared guessed.


Hey that's a code name for my character.

“My dad has been entrusted to care for this little demigoddess with the touch of death,” Jared answered. “Her name is Omorose, but we call her Rose. She’s about seven now.”


This sounds really cool so far.

“Old Gods, New Gods, Project God,” he said, standing slowly. Gaea had fallen asleep, and he didn’t want to disturb her. “Altogether too many gods in this world. There’s going to be trouble.”


And....Roll Credits!! (Sorry I watched too much CinemaSins)

Aaand that's it for this one.

Overall: It was a really fun piece to read. Lots of mystery and intrigue in this one. I have half a mind to track down this "Passcode" and go read it. That should be fun...Maybe once my mission is complete. At any rate this was pretty well written and I saw no grammar mistakes.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry

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Nox commented Comment · Sep 30, 2005

It was a little confusing and isn't Branwen meant to be in this story? Or is this set in a time before her birth?

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Fishr wrote a review Review · Sep 30, 2005

Interesting writing but a bit confusing for me. What is the difference between all the 'gods'? And it was hard to determine if Angel was human or a 'god'. Had to read it twice to understand better but still confused on mainly on the conversation the two men were having. What did it mean?

If this was related to another story(probably missed it, Passcode, I think you said?), this might have made better sense to me. I didn't know it was like a prologue, if that's the right word, to the story Passcode, as I didn't know from the title. :)

Keep plugging away at it and it will be great! Very intriguing mind you have. Most lively and refreshing. :D Reminds me alot of Greek Mythology, which is my all time favorate thing to read about!

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Zeera commented Comment · Sep 28, 2005

This was a nice mix of Sci-fi and Fantasy, but I don't think they end up well together. But it all depends on the writer.

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brandenwallace commented Comment · Sep 26, 2005

The writing is alright but I don't care for the subject.



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