A poem I wrote for a boy I was in a long relationship with but passed away.
Spelling, grammar mistakes ex. iLove etc. are on purpose! Just the way I wanted to express my poem.
I'll never love somebody as much as iLove you
Yeah Love as in still do, and always will.
But the pain of you leaving,
is what iHate to feel.
iMiss your laugh,
Miss your touch.
It's like you left in such a rush.
iDon't know what I'm gonna do.
It's crazy how much iMiss you.
Nobody will ever compare.
You leaving just isn't fair.
But YOU are the love of MY LIFE.
'til the day iDie.
-Copyright. Written August 20Th 2010.
R.i.p Baby.
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Thanks so much! It's positive stuff like that, that keeps me from completely breaking down & being depressed. I miss him sooo much. But he's looking down smiling & all I wanna do is keep him proud of me! Like, he always said he was.
It gets harder everyday, but I just have to stay strong. Thanks again. =)
And no problem. And no worries, he's up in the clouds at Jesus's side. Watching over you! He's okay up there, no sickness, all kindness and good health. Not that I've ever visited heaven but, you know. : ) Anyway, if you ever need anybody to talk to Libby I'm open!
- Jessica
Thanks, the critique is good too! =)
Thanks for the support.
Aww! I'm so sorry! That's a really nice poem. : )
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Red- Nice, though could have been written a little differently
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Note- I'm used to reviewing stories, so this is awkward for me. Sorry!
So, lovely poem. Strong and heart renching. Keep writing, and PM me if you need absolutly anything!
- Jessica
Yeah thanks.
This expresses alot of my feelings. How I feel everyday.
But I try to stay strong. It's what he'd want.
Wow, that's a really strong poem. Aw