Published December 6, 2005
And she’s reaching for a feeling
She can’t see and never knew before,
Getting hurts her habit,
But it’s so much harder to ignore,
Her painful heart beating,
It’s aching and eating,
Away at her soul,
She can’t find her mind
And she’s losing control,
Tears stain her makeup,
Lies line her lips,
The words that escape her,
Are parts of a script.
And she’s reaching for a feeling,
She never knew and can’t ignore,
Her shadow's a mere stranger,
Who is she anymore?
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nice rhyming and use of metaphor in this... i really like the phrase, "lies line her lips," thats powerful. its a little weird that you started the poem with the word "and," but i guess that makes unique...
nice work.