Published April 8, 2012
Have you ever felt so alone,
Like nothing makes since anymore
Well, that's how I feel right now
Like I'm facing everything alone
With nothing but tears and a fake smile
I know life was never meant to be easy
but I never thought it would be this hard
I try to see the good things in life
but, good things in life are just hard to find
You've taken away everything
Why can't you see
My silence is another word for my pain
I'm tired or fighting a battle I'll never win
Waiting for my time
You ruined me
Afraid
You Ruined me
You've taken away everything
Open up your eye's
and look with in yourself
Are you happy with the life your living
Open up your eyes
Because your heart can tell no lies
Although, sometimes you have to lie
In order to find all truth
The cruelest lies are told in silence
but when truth is replaced by silence
The silence is a lie
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I agree that this would do well if it was separated into stanzas. Also about the typos.
The point I want to get out though is that this is very well written. You've just voiced a lot for many silenced and I love that.
"The cruelest lies are told in silence
but when truth is replaced by silence
The silence is a lie"
I love these lines best, quite probing.
Keep writing! Never stop.
I love the message of this poem and the idea of it. I also like the flow of it, it sounds very musical and pretty. I suggest you separate it into stanzas, it would be a bit easier to read and follow. Also, I noticed a few typos in there, so you may want to check over it again and fix those. That's all, good job, keep writing!
Beautiful, truly! ..
I love this so much! This is how I feel all the time. It's like you read my mind..... O_o