Hey! K1553 Here with a review.
I think you made the most out of this challenge. You were able to describe a character very well, even in few sentences, and even if all of them started with the same word.
I like how you used black to convey different meanings. The way I saw it, first it was the girl, her personality and her demeanor. Then black meant difficulty and evil at school. After that, it morphed into a color to describe the girl's magick.
I don't know if you intended it this way, but as I see it the last paragraph can be interpreted in two ways. The first is that the girl literally practiced witchcraft. The second is that her magick was something more; it was something within her. Maybe she was literally seeking revenge on those girls in some way? I don't know. But I enjoyed the ambiguity that I perceived in the last lines.
I would only go so far as to criticize one sentence: "Black letters created poems." I felt that it was out of place in the school setting, because school to her did not mean somewhere good or full of art, or somewhere where she good express herself. To me poetry is just that, and does not have a a place in such a negative environment. You could have used a sentence that described school more.
But other than that, it was a terrific short story. I love writing challenges.
Points: 20
Reviews: 9
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