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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!!
First Impression: Well...this seems like it would make for quite a fun story. There's definitely a lot going on here...and that ending especially was awesome...I think I will definitely be checking out chapter two of this little series very soon. Anyways, onto some more details.
Anyway let's get right to it,
The assassin glanced warily around.
Faces, millions of different faces pleading, scared. They circled Verena, slowly pushing forward toward where she seemed to float. All were looking at the gun, the gun she held.
Her finger pressed back in the trigger, but not on her command. It felt as if someone else had forced it.
Ohh...very dramatic start there, definitely a really nice way to start the first chapter of a story here...well...well...let's see where this ends up going.
Muffled sounds, a gunshot, screams, the wail of sirens.
“Erase them from your memory,” Madam Bavlias voices echoed,” the world is better without them.”
But she couldn’t.
Well that Madam person sounds like someone who's probably not very good....also sirens and gunshots, oh wow, its all happening right here in the first couple of paragraph.
Verena couldn’t shake the pleading faces, ingrained in her mind before she killed them.
She gasped, and her eyes snapped open.
The pounding of her heart triggered her instincts.
Well...I get the feeling this is probably some sort of nightmare judging from that....which would imply that's probably the past of some sort...well...I guess the title is starting to make sense here....which is great.
She tensed, senses heightened.
The dim room slowly came into focus and Verena realized she wasn’t in any danger.
She breathed out.
Verena blinked, letting her eyes further adjust to the darkness. She glanced at her watch.
The glowing numbers mocked her. Twenty minutes, twenty meagre minutes since she last had woken up from the same nightmare.
Well I guess my little theory was correct then...also a nice little fade into the realization there...using the watch and the darkness.
Verena swung her leg over the side of her bed.
She’d gotten a total of eight hours of sleep in the last week. Her mental health was tipping, as well as her physical state as an assassin. Her wits had to be sharp. Her mind quick, and her speed faster and quieter.
Oh dear...well that definitely does not sound like a great situation to be in...you can definitely see that something is gnawing on our assassin here.
Madam Bavila had signed her off missions for the next few weeks. But she hadn’t been thrilled her best agent was down.
Most assassins were able to erase the faces as they were trained. Verena had tried, but every time she closed her eyes, the haunting looks tugged at her. The nightmares had progressively gotten worse over the last few years. She’d gone from top assassin to barely be able to get through a training session.
Well..that is a bit of an ouch...although definitely a very human thing to experience there sadly...on the bright side I guess this madam character isn't as bad as I initially expected them to be...or are they...we'll see I guess.
Verena was now quarantined in the living quarters or, as madam bavila had said,” Assignment .”
She’d assigned her to a diet of medication and plenty of food. As well as sleep, if she could manage any.
The assassin chuckled as if this could be named an assignment.
Assignment or not, that definitely sounds like something that she very much needs to pull off there.
Verena got up and wandered the empty halls. She shoved her hand in the pocket of her sweat pants and wiggled her fingers until they caught the small communicator.
She pulled it out and slipped it into her ear. Tapping it twice, activating it.
“I don’t suppose my conscience is up?”
“You know I am.”
Oooooh...some suuper mysterious dialogue to end the chapter...loving that...definitely a great way to end a first chapter...and really make you want to read the next one.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall I think this is a really nice little first chapter here...and our assassin here appears to be a pretty interesting character to follow...can't judge too much on that because its just the beginning...but ehh...well....anyway, that's all I've to say here.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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