A subtle feeling

by LadyClay

Published February 20, 2012

In Poetry

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It's a subtle feeling.

A hallow wind of despair consuming you,
eating you up from your deepest thoughts.

A tender enigmatic flow of desperation,
trying to reach a taste of perfection.

You can make life beautiful,
and paint the sky with colors of love.

Change your world
and mold it from the fruit of your imagination.

No one will judge you,
only futile spirits are ignorant of the smell of life.

Looking at the past is not a shame,
surely the horizon is not bright enough,

To let the golden sunset shine through my dream
and make it real from the palm of my hand.

I can't hold into your warmth or feel your touch on my skin without feeling fear.

Of losing you,

Losing your eyes on me,

Losing the taste of your simple kisses.

I will repose my soul on your shoulder 
then close my mind to the sound of your heartbeat.

It's a subtle feeling between hesitation and awareness.

The sky is still blue as I write,
I hope it would be rose tomorrow,

When I open my eyes again...
To a new feeling.
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heather321 wrote a review Review · Feb 21, 2012

This is really good, the imagery and flow is amazing! The only thing i really found was
"To let the golden sunset shines through my dream"
..It should be "shine" not "shines" and also it should be "losing" not "loosing"
Other than that though it's a great poem!

Thanks a lot for the correcting part, and your comment really mean a lot to me, thanks for reading!



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