Never grow a wishbone where your backbone should be
When you're mentally drowning you can still find room to breathe
The first time someone shows you their true colors - believe them
When just floating isn't enough, you have got to swim
Question everything you read
Just don't fall blindly into things
No is a complete sentence
You don't know how much you liked a journey until the ending
And when everyone else is forgetting
There is always something you're remembering
Everyone is a human being
There are a lot of things we don't see
Even when we're looking
And when the earthquake is finally still
Something else comes in for the kill
That is what I know. My first poem.
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For a first poem, this is genuinely fantastic!
I love the rhyme scheme in the first four lines, very good choice of words there. I also like how you change the form/structure of the poem after those first four lines. I think this represents how not everyone shows their true colours when you first meet them, and you shouldn't grow accustomed to people being like that as they will reveal their true colours in the end.
The ending was very good, really gave me something to think about!
Well done on a great poem, I hope you keep writing!
Thank you so much!
Hi there!
First off, Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy yourself here and have a lot of fun!
This poem is really good. I love the word use, the rhythm, and how relatable it is. You make some very, very good points here, and everything you say is true. The only critical thing I have to say is that on this line:
"You don't know how much you liked a journey until the ending" I would say "end." That is just a personal stylistic preference though.
Keep up the good work!
Thank you for the review.
Hi, well for it being your first poem it literally has a good meaning to it.Some places rhyming scheme doesn't fit but still it is awesome.My favourite lines are
" And when the earthquake is finally still
Something else comes to kill."
Keep up the good work.😊
Thank you!