Published March 19, 2019
People said they loved me.
When did they stop?
People said they believed in me.
When did they give up?
People said I was unique.
Now I'm a freak.
People said they care.
But when did they forget?
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I love it. Just love it.
Thank you!
Brilliant one!! The poem is way too short. But it's very very strong and deep. You really have shown something that we all feel. You know, revolution starts in this way. Yup,revolution against the blind society. That's a very good job. Hope to read more revolutionary poems and many more. So keep writing.
-shipra10.
Thank you so much!
Wow. So short yet it hits you so hard. This is like emotionally deep. Like, I don't know you or anything, but I want to comfort you. This poem is like, strong. I love it! I love the deep thoughts of it, and how it feels so real. You've made this into so much, in so little words. I can't even describe it. This is really good, so please keep up the good work, continue writing such strong, emotional poetry. You're really good at it! Love, Joseph, noob writer.
Thank you so much! I hoped people would feel and relate to it
HEEEEYYYYY one insy bensy thing.
I want to say lol
On the bottom line it might sound better if you say
But when did the (Not)?
instead of forget.
Either than that its great!!!
Nice effort!!!!
Anma Out
Lol
thanks
BRAVO!!!!
Thanks!
Your welcome. You're poems are really awesome, by the way.
Thanks! That means a lot
Hey, hi, hello, and good day to you from me. Now, I'm not very experienced with poetry, so take all that I say with a grain of salt. With that small disclaimer out of the way, I can say that I did rather like this poem. You kept a somewhat inconsistent rhyme scheme, but there's not a thing wrong with that. You made a very relatable point and all that we all strive for, that said, this piece wasn't perfect (not that I expect it to be, I just figure that pointing out some of the weak spots will help you moving forward on other works).
Those problems are mostly rooted in your lack of a solid conclusion. Typically in a poem like this one, you will start out by proclaiming the point, (the questions you have about the feelings of the people around you toward you) and then "backing it up" in a way. Maybe ask some more questions, have your narrator wonder what about them caused other people to forget. Or you could end on a positive note by having your narrator realize something that they hadn't before. Like, maybe they realize that someone around them has been doing little extra things to make them smile. Maybe they realize that they were the one pulling away and that they needed to reach out.
I don't know, maybe this was helpful, maybe it wasn't. Either way, nice poem.
It was helpful! Thank you so much