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Hello Avalon! Weather here with a review.

"Will you stay with me for just one night? to remind me of what I lost. Will you stay with me after that night, to help guide me back to Grace? Even if you might become Fallen from on High."

I presume its the formatting problem here, but that's okay it can easily be fixed. Anyways onto the review!

I really liked where you were going with this poem, it almost felt like an incomplete short story, you could consider continuing on with it, it has potential.
I have a few suggestions to make however.

There should be a capitalization of, "To". At certain points the flow was interrupted especially in the last two lines. You have to be careful with short poems, they should be quite effective and not have many punctuation/grammar mistakes as their easier to notice if shorter. The second line had too many words in it and was a bit too interrelated with the previous line.

You could potentially fall into the romance cliche, so create a unique type of imagery and description that will set your apart from the other types. I think you could do with adding more length and imagery in general but this was not a bad beginning.

Overall a good piece, keep writing.

--Weather

Hi there

Even though this is so short, there is a lot of depth to it. It seems so bittersweet. She's asking him to risk everything for her. It's beautiful.

My only critique is this:

to remind me of what I lost.

Hey there! Purple here to give you a review! Let's get down to business!
So this is a very short poem but not quite so simple. Maybe it's clear to you what it means, but to the reader it is not. Also, this is not in standard "poem format" of stanzas and lines and some sort of rhythm.
Poems are usually unsuccessful being so short, but you could have greately improved this in making it look more like one
Keep it up! Have a nice night!
~Purple