Turning eighteen is not all fun and games. It doesn’t mean complete freedom like most of us would think. Freedom like buying liquor, driving, no curfews or being able to move out of the house. It’s more than that. We are kids with adult powers. However we don’t know how to use it wisely. So to serve as a guide, here are 4 responsibilities I have learned when I turned 18 recently.
As young people we are free spirited. When we enter the adult world, we must be more careful and become more observant of the rules. We are entering the world of reality and we must slowly shift our views. Continue to follow rules as you did before and is still doing now. Rules your parents made and other rules. Since we have become one of the role models of the younger generation.
Whether we are still living with them or not we must continue to show respect towards them. We might not know it but parents have sacrificed so much for us. They are the reason why we are here and a big part of us was shaped by them. Though we are old enough to make our own decisions, we must still listen to their advices. It wouldn’t hurt listening and it will really help us in the future
3.) Never forget to take care of our body.
Turning 18 doesn’t mean we should be reckless especially towards the care for your body. We need remember to drink in moderation and still get enough sleep as much as possible. Avoid going to parties every night. Leave a day or days where you are sober and your body rested. Most especially if you are still studying just like me. To maintain focus and to be able to absorb the lessons well.
With all these responsibilities and to do’s we are forced to grow up fast. Try to remember that we only become 18 once. Don’t force yourself to do things you can’t and don’t want to do. However do try especially if it’s for the best.We must take our time, slowly but surely. May it be love, career ,work or much more the future. Still we must do everything we want but in moderation. Never erase the little kid inside us. Let it show once in awhile. The world still need people who can act mature like an adult and still sympathize like a kid.
Everything has its own time. As we journey to adulthood we must take our time. Choose our steps carefully and be brave and strong enough to face everything. To remember the things and people that matter most, and to live our lives to the fullest.
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Hello Khriziavee, I'm outvaders and I'm stopping by for a review this Review Day. It seems you're new to this place, so a belated welcome to YWS! It's a pleasure providing you with one of your first reviews.
This essay is very well-structured. It has the conventional structure: intro, body and conclusion.
It also elaborates each of the supports, and ends on an okay note. However, it's boring. I mean, it's good in a conventional sense, but it's boring. It has no personality whatsoever. It's funny because you said that these responsibilities are things you've learned when you turned eighteen, but there isn't much trace of your personal experiences in this essay. The problem if an essay is too boring or uninteresting is that it's going to make little impact in the reader. They'll forget about your advice if you're too dull. It's kind of like being a teacher.
One simple way to remedy this is to add your personal experiences in there. It's simple, yet effective. Add a little anecdote for each support or something like that. Narrate a little experience in your life, or state your personal beliefs, anything to add traces of you into the essay. This is also about you, after all. If you do this, not only will you maintain the interest of your readers, this essay will also be validated by the real life experiences you shared.
Anyways, that's it for my review. I apologize if my review is short, but I'm just a bit tired. Nonetheless, I hope you learned something from this review. Have a good Review Day!
-outvaders
Heeeey there! I'll go ahead and put my thoughts in on this.
Firstly, (this is probably a smaller nitpick,) you've published this under Novel / Chapter, which gives off an impression that this is part of a series of chapters? Which it doesn't appear to be. As I read on, it sounded to me more like an essay or such of an assignment? The category just seems like it might not be entirely accurate, but with time it may develop into something.
I'm keen on advice. Especially good advice, duh. But there's a kind of authoritative voice necessary to pull off the right advice. Going through the different "sections," I'm realizing how a real good majority of these could apply to people of all ages, instead of just the target age range. I'm also kind of rubbing off the idea that you don't have too much experience in "adulthood" yourself, as your age lists as eighteen. And that's cool. But again, it's the right authority to give advice or share information. I'd love it if you found a better way to personalize the information, like a mention that you, as well, are slightly journeying through the surface of this bigger step, maybe?
This is the main highlight of false information for me. Starting with the title: Start obeying rules. I only see an issue with this because of the first word specifically, start. Maaaybe the idea of transitioning into adulthood isn't to begin following rules, but more of a continuation of following a series of rules, just as you have throughout the course of your whole life. The other thing I'd like to touch on is the very first sentence, "As teenagers we were used to being carefree." Which may be a slight generalization. And I hate to be this person, getting unnecessarily all defensive, but really. That might not be a right measurement of teenagers behaviours.
That's about all I wanted to cover, but I appreciate these pieces of advice. It was kind of you to share.
-amelie.
hi! thank you so much for this. I am not really good at writing buut I am trying my best. I was also shocked when I was listed under novels. I thought I clicked essay.. hmmm
but, Thank you sooo much! this means a lot to me