I’m looking for all the words.
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They used to be mine!
On a good day, gently floating around me.
I catch a word. On the paper it goes.
On a bad day, violently flying around me.
I look at a word. It hits the paper with force.
Where did all the words go?
LOST
They used to be so easy to find!
Writer’s block.
There is no cure.
All my words.
Are gone.
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hey, here for a review!!
I would say fits better and makes more sense. It then starts off the poem with more of a stronger and less choppy line.AH, I'm just going to say that this poem is very comical and focuses on a wise topic of writer's block. I mean at least you found some words to write a poem about!
Okay, now let's just get into the review (I haven't written one in such a long time so....)
The first line kind of bothered me right off the bat, it seems as if it is missing a word.
This whole stanza is kind of vague, if you would maybe clarify what is gently floating around (though I get that it is your words). It doesn't have to be full on like putting the word "words" throughout your stanza, but it could be more whimsical hinting on your topic is.
Another comment I have about that stanza above, is that the last two lines doesn't settle within me that it's screaming writer's block. It says to me that on some bad days, which I assume are writer's block days, words are flying around in your head and you peer and look, chose a word and seemingly fling it on your paper. That's the message I get and it doesn't seem like the writer's block I correlate with, which is not being able to get anything on a page or write at all. I would try to tweak it a little to see what else you could come up with regarding writer's block there.
What I do like though is your whimsical punctuation and the capitalized letters with the BLOCK and LOST.
The ending, to me, is the weakest part of your poem and I'm not a really big fan of it.
Here you didn't need the writer's block line, it's kind of redundant because your message and description of writer's block is there and I knew what you were talking about before I read that line. If you think your poem might be unclear to some, maybe try putting another synonym, I guess that's what makes most sense, to make it seem like writer's block without putting it completely out there. The last to lines are kind go cliche and you would be better off just not putting them there and ending it at the "there is no cure".
Well, your poem was really good and funny and I liked it a lot. I hope to see more of your work and best of luck writing them!!
You misunderstood this stanza
That was me describing how things are when I don't have writer's block. But since I can't find the words, I return to the fact that it's writer's block, and I can't find a cure. Thanks for the review !
Hey, Keumgan! Scythe here to do a quick review
This was so quirky and funny—I loved it!
Writer's block can be so miserable and irritating (I should know, I've had it for almost a year. Finally getting back into writing again though!). I loved how you talked about it, it's an interesting topic to cover, but also, you wrote about it perfectly and precisely.
This section was on point, to some extent. It's not so much there are no words—as writers, we have an abundance of words at arms reach, but there's also dictionaries, etc—but rather, the ability to function and link those words together in a way that properly presents what is trying to be portrayed becomes a struggle. It's not just that, I find that the imagination becomes strained and mustering up an idea is harder than usual.
With this section, I got slightly confused:
What are you suggesting? That on a good day, there are is no writer's block, and the words are easier to access? On the bad day, writer's block is apparent, and it's hard to find words? I don't see why the words are written down with "force" though.
I guess my major issue with this part (and overall, actually) is that Writer's block is being described as having an issue with words. Sometimes, yes, that does happen but I think there is a larger issue with it, like I've already said, it's the imagination of the writer.
Nevertheless, great job! I adored this, it was so unique and fun to read. I hope to read more of your work in the future!
- ScytheMeister
Hi there. The real behind the good day and the bad day is actually how I used to find my words. I used to be able to find the words floating gently on a good day, then write them. On a bad day, there would be so much anger that my words would be flying haphazardly all over the place with violence. And all I had to do was look at the right word, and it just slams itself on the paper. Now, I can't find words on a good or a bad day. Makes sense?
hi. this is kman134. i'm here to review your work.
It's hard to find the right word to say. every time one appears it would immediately disappear from your mind. this is the reason many writers have writer's block, mainly because they have it but it disappears. the emotional tone was somber and exploratory on the philosophy of the mind.
"On a good day, gently floating around me.
I catch a word. On the paper it goes.
On a bad day, violently flying around me.
I look at a word. It hits the paper with force."
This was my favorite stanza. it brings out the duality of body and mind while also providing a metaphysical perspective of the thought process. usually, when being inspired to keep writing, one would have a muse to give them the imagination they need to continue write.
Anyways, i love your work. i hope to read more of your work.
Thank you for your review! You'll read some more of my work as soon as I find my words
Hey there, sunshine!
Kat here for a review!
I would like to first note how much I loved the short tartness of this piece, as well as the inclusion of the all-caps words. I especially enjoyed the narrator's gradual descent into writer's block, and it was both amusing yet saddening when I reached the end.
I also enjoyed the parallelism in the four-line stanza, which really added to the contrast/juxtaposition between the energy of inspiration and lack of it.
That's all for today! This was an amazing piece!
Keep writing!
Thanks for the review!