Published February 17, 2006
i don't know why
words on lines are
so entertaining as they
march
march across the paper in
no
particualr
order
or why my old, chewed on
yellow pencil could
create art -no- music
with words
only words
because it is alien to me
but then what is not
alien if
you've
never
seen
it
before?
so i sit and let the gears and levers
(and wheels)
work in my brain and
i chew on my pencil
out of pure
habit.
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thanks, and the no particular order is as in lines- not words. the world would be a catastrophe if we talked like this:
pizza it tastes with icky butter to peanut me.
my, you like to curse! *just saw your blog*
march across the paper in
no
particualr
order
Usually when people write, they usually KNOW what order the words go to... I mean, when was the last time you read a sentence that said:
Pizza it are go good pepsi said with John. *Insert quotation marks... somewhere* lol
But I liked this though, good rhythm.
I do like your writing. You have a very elegant style that lends itself well to poetry and storytelling.
This poem has a subject that I have frequently thought about, lol, so it is special to me. However, I like some of your other work better.
good poem. rhythmic.