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Contractual Love

by Kelisot


Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for mature content.

HAPPY PRIDE MONTH!!! I'M RELEASING A FRUITY SHORT FOR PRIDE MONTH MWAH

IF YOU ENJOYED READING THIS SHORT STORY, GIVE A LIKE, A REVIEW, AND MAYBE FOLLOW ME FOR UPDATES (IF THAT'S A THING, IDK)

  The Weathers are a non-human race of magicians that can control parts of the atmosphere with their own will. The Amenos race is a race that roughly translates to "Defiled/Blemished Ones". He is also called an "incubus" because his powers are related to sexual pleasures and arousals.

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The Weather only saw the raven-haired Incubus cuddling next to him under the soft white blankets. He knew that the act of sleeping with a prostitute, specifically one originating from a defiling race was a great offense to his entire race. It wasn't just a taboo or an outlawed custom, sleeping with a prostitute, male or female, or of another gender was an immoral and shameless act.

But there was a deal, and it wasn't just only humans who would determine themselves to get their hands dirty to get what they wanted. That was the primal instinct of every sapient race and organism, one that was egocentric and only benefited themselves by either helping others, whether such actions were good or evil. Jason wanted to hide evidence of bloodshed he had caused, to silence the screaming blood of the dead. And the Incubus simply wanted to have a boy sleeping next to him.

The Devil, the petite Incubus who was fully naked (and was luckily covered), was sounding in deep sleep. Jason took a good look at him and stared deeply into his face, close enough that their two lips were about to kiss. He felt the warm breath the Incubus inhaled and exhaled, the Weather founded delight of the soft, cute noise he made each time. Putting his ears at his chest, a muffled ba-dump echoed in the Weather's ears. The Weather realized doing this was very lewd and pervy, and the Incubus would've not been happy after knowing what he had done.

Then were these actions done by lust? Or was it love? No, there were no romantic intentions, the two of them were only in a bed together because of contractual love, not covenantal love. The two were nothing but strangers. Two strangers who desperately needed each other out of need, whether it was just for sexual pleasure or cleaning and fabricating evidence of a felony. So why did he feel guilty about leaving this place, knowing that he screwed up his life more and would continue screwing others?

Jason stared at the Benyamin name tag fallen across the room, as he once looked back at the cute boy. With the ruby eyes that stared at him with care and love (no, it was lust), Jason knew that he would never see anyone that would stare at him again with such eyes. Jason didn't know whether Benyamin had loved him at that moment and still way, but he savored that moment. But apprehension knew-- emotions would change, and the same passion and love from last night will never spark from him or himself again.

So he decided. Jason stood and wrote a note on the table in the room, and a little farewell gift to the adorable Incubus. It was all for the best, so everyone would forget-- and it was a win-win deal that he and Benyamin wanted.

But as Jason walked outside the house, and into the mundane, dusty world, he paused for thought: Was that the best choice, to abandon the boy who loved him?


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Mon Jun 13, 2022 3:58 pm
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Hi! I thought this was a really cute story. I love the LGBTQ+ inclusion, and I thought the focus on contractual love was really interesting. There was a lot of philosophical musings in this story, and I thought you brought up fascinating questions. I also loved the world-building, and the way you were able to explore a human emotion (love) in a non-human setting. That said, I feel like there were some details of this story that were still a little vague. For example, how did the contractual love between Jason and the Incubus come to be? Did they literally draw up a contract? Or was it just a relationship that evolved organically, and happens to take the form of contractual love? I think seeing more of the background between the two would make their relationship more meaningful to the reader; as it is, what you’ve described of their relationship seems very interesting and sweet. I also want to learn more about Jason. You wrote in the second paragraph that he “wanted to hide evidence of bloodshed he had caused”. I found this description intriguing and it added a lot of depth to his character. In this passage, he seems so compassionate and loving in describing the Incubus, it’s strange to imagine him being a murderer. But I’d like to learn more about his background and why he’s causing bloodshed. Overall, this is a cool and fascinating story and I love how fruity it is <3.




Kelisot says...


Ah... I'm going to write another drabble about it too. I should work on not making everything too vague... maybe that's why no one can solve my enigmas and cryptic messages.
But thank you for this review!



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Hey Kelisot!

Happy Monday! Just stopping by today for a quick review. I really appreciate the background that you gave at the top of the piece, it was really helpful to have this view going in. Are these races you (or someone else) have previously created, or are they brand new? If they're new, it might be interesting to explore how you could introduce them within the story rather than with a PSA outside of the actual narrative.

I think it worked really well that you've started with such a conflict. It gives us an immediate insight into your character and what's important to him vs how that sits with the rest of his race. It makes us want to read on!

But there was a deal, and it wasn't just only humans who would determine themselves to get their hands dirty to get what they wanted.

I found this a really difficult sentence to get my head around. I think it was the use of 'determine' but I couldn't work out what was being conveyed. This is also a bit true of the sentence that follows it, perhaps you could play around with the paragraph to make it more concise?

close enough that their two lips were about to sleep

Is sleep the right word here?

You explore some very interesting issues in the piece through the guise of fantasy and I'd like to see it expanded on somewhat. I'd be interested to see how Jason acts in the rest of his life to disguise this other life that he has to hide from his race, and also just to explore more of the world in general as the premise is definitely intriguing!

In a future edit, it might also be interesting to explore a conversation between these two characters (perhaps in a flashback to the previous night) as I think that might help us as a reader to connect more with the story.

Hope this was helpful!

Icy




Kelisot says...


OMG TYPO I'M SO SORRY
I WROTE THIS LIKE AT 12 AM AND I COMPLETELY FORGOT I'M SORRY




Journeys end in lovers' meeting.
— William Shakespeare