“Moo” said the cow
As the farmer strolled by.
He exclaimed “wow!”
as he realized why.
You see young reader
cows go moo.
The universe would teeter
if I mooed to you.
One thing can moo.
What if cows flew?
It just wouldn’t work
like eating soup with fork
Question my logic?
Then here’s a project
Find out what my fox says
You would not get it
Besides, I just fed it
That thing is quite sound asleep
I hope I make sense
like a yard and a fence
They just go together
Like birds of a feather
Oh! The fox is awake!
If you think I’m a fake
Then here is a cake
Go feed it for Pete’s Sake!
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I'm Nire. Hello! ^3^
So, I read it twice! First time, after seeing the title, I was sincerely looking for some serious and wise sort of poetry but what you have here is veryy silly and craazy! xD Tell you what! I love crazy! Loved what you have here too!
Yet again senor Odd has left a great review for you and I just don't feel like repeating. But, few suggestions as always
This part of your poetry was a lot understandable than the rest. Not saying it makes sense and the rest doesn't but it goes together. Like, you just stayed with cow and moo and all. But, from eating soup with fork to the very end, it just felt little bit weird. Again, your entire poem is weird (In a very good-funny way) but last few lines were weirder. Looks like you just didn't know how to keep going with it.
I appreciate how you've tried rhyming here! Overall, good job! Have a great day and keep writing! x
~Nire!
Hello, it's MsPoetry15 for a review!
This poem was such a cheerful and oddly quirky in an adorable and interesting way. It's a great work, however I saw a few things wrong with this. One, when it goes from "One thing can moo," to "What if cows flew?" the structure and words lose me. It's such a stark contrast, and really doesn't have a place in this poem. Try blending it more gradually, kind of like a story. That's all poems really are anyway, a rhythmic story. Then, while everything rhymes, fork and work don't. Other than this, I really enjoyed reading your poem, and I hope you continue the good work.
Happy Writings!
hello my name is Hannah and here's my review of your poem
I like how you also added humor into the poem and I think its a great piece of work. and I can tell you've put in a lot of hard work and effort in to this which is great. overall I think this is absolutely fantastic keep up the good work 
I enjoyed reading it, I like that you used rhyming words my favorite is when you said "oh! the fox is awake! if you think I'm a fake here's some cake go feed it for Pete's sake" hehe
Hi this is Maddie with a poetry review for you!
Ok, I read this twice; once just reading, then again I read it out loud.
What. the. heck. LOL
I mean, this is just one of the silliest poems I have ever read. I don't know if you meant it to be that way, but by God, this is just the quickest, weirdest metered, most innocently deep poem I have seen in a long time.
One of the few issues with this poem is that it's meter, which is decent at first, just completely falls apart near the middle.
"Work" and "Fork" do not rhyme.
After that, it just sounds a bit strange. I'd suggest reading this out loud, because then you can actually hear the problems instead of letting your eyes just glance over them.
Other than that, I actually find it hard to fully comprehend what the message of this piece is. Are you talking about everyone being different and accepting that? Are you talking about the status quo? You need to be clear, especially with the title "The Logic of Life"
It has to sound like logic, not just random metaphors.
Also, the fox reference, that was distracting.
Because of that song, whenever someone reads a phrase like that, they will automatically zone out and start thinking of the song. Hell, I started humming it.
This could be a really quirky and entertaining piece. Just fix up the problems and it should be amazing.
Keep writing!
~Maddie
Thank you for the review. Honestly, I was bored. And I did read it aloud. I really just felt that people make all these deep poems, so I would just kind of tease at it. Thank you for reviewing and thank you for the helpful criticism. Also, I am writing a realistic poem, so I am not too weird.
Hello, I am here to review.
After going through that roller-coaster of a poem, I will say that it was a very random poem, and yet I really like it. I also really like that this poem has a good flow and I found myself reading it in a sort of sing-song voice. However, there are some things that I would like to point out.
First of all, capitalize every beginning of a verse. In poetry, you do not always need to capitalize, but since you do it in some verses and you don't in some others, it looks awkward, so every beginning of verse, capitalize the first word.
Then, there are a couple of slight grammar mistakes, which I will correct in red:
Also, if you are going to use punctuation, use it everywhere. You use full stops at the beginning of your poem and then drop them completely, which may confuse the reader.
There is this other thing that bothers me a bit:
Now, I am sure that when you say you hope you make sense, you are only telling the reader you don't. If that is not the case, I suggest you change this, because the two verses do not make that much sense at all, and, in my opinion, you just wrote that because fence rhymes with sense. However, that is only my opinion and I may be misinterpreting it.
Apart from that, the poem is pretty good, and I like how it comes out of the norm.
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Keep on writing!
Thank you for the comment! I was having some problems when typing this up, so that is why there are some mistakes. Also, with the capitalization, there was supposed to be several stanzas, but again, typing problems. It made more sense with the poem split into stanzas. And again, thank you for my first review!
It is my pleasure!