Call Me a Planet
A play by E.M.S.C
Setting: Deep in our solar system around the time Pluto is declared a dwarf planet
Cast:
Pluto The loner planet upset that he's no longer called a planet.
Uranus A jumbled up strange old-timer character
Jupiter& Saturn partners in crime who delight to hear Pluto's change of status and bully him about it
Neptune a caring two side type person who tells Pluto the great news.
Mars your regular cold keep to myself type character
Earth a rather dignified prideful character.
Venus her twin sister who is very cruel mean angry stormy at Pluto
Mercury a feisty angry but at the same time malignantly intelligent charact
Act 1
Scene 1
Jupiter: Did you hear that Saturn? There calling Pluto a dwarf planet. It will really serve him well to give him a new status he needed it.
Saturn: Yes indeed Jupiter your mightiness but who will tell him about his being out of planet?
Jupiter: That's enough Saturn I have no patience for puns as for who will tell Pluto about his unfortunate fate Neptune Uranus will tell her the news.
Saturn: Am I the one who has to deliver the message to Uranus?
Jupiter: Of course you are
Saturn: Very well however I never really liked . . .
Jupiter: DO AS I SAY WITHOUT COMPLAINING I already know you hate Uranus there isn't a planet that doesn't.
Saturn: Uranus!!
Uranus: What is it Saturn what's so important that you had to disrupt my peaceful orbit?
Saturn: I expect you will be pleased to hear that Pluto is no longer a planet but a dwarf planet Jupiter wanted you to tell Neptune
Uranus: Whatever it's all the same to me. I'm just glad it's her not I that will tell Pluto. I've never cared much for him or any other planet particularly Pluto not after he gave me this awkward spin I so abhor!
Uranus: Good orbiting to you Neptune
Neptune: Uranus I know you’re there. It's not your style to be polite so can you get to the news?
Uranus: You must of heard then any way tell Pluto that we real planets no longer view him as a planet but a dwarf Planet
Naptune: Well he's not going to like that . . .but I'll tell him anyway
Uranus: Good
Neptune: Not that you'd care
Uranus: Well I don't tolerate being turned over on my side!
Neptune: Well happy orbit then
. . .
Neptune: Pluto!
Pluto: Yah what's up Neptune
Neptune: Uh . . .um . . .Nothing good for you
Pluto: Ah come on Neptune nothings to bad
Neptune: What if I told you you are no longer classified as a planet?
Pluto: What! No way I am a planet!
Neptune: Obviously they don't view you that way anymore
Pluto: Well then to bad for them
Neptune: If you want to complain about this go bother Saturn and Jupiter
Pluto: Oh planet I'm doomed
Act 2
Pluto: Why can't you call me a planet?
Jupiter: You are to small for one secant you aren't big like me of course
Pluto: That's no reason!
Jupiter: Why yes it is you don't even have a solid atmosphere!
Pluto: What have I ever done to deserve this status I tell you I am a planet!
So call me one!
Song: Call me call me a planet
I've lived in this universe for millions of years
and I've never known anything other then the life of a planet
and I'm a planet wannabe
so call me call me a planet*
I may be small I may have an odd orbit I may not be covered in gas
but call me a planet!
Call me call me a planet!
I've lived in this universe for millions years and I've never known anything other then the life of a planet *Song lyrics soon to be posted by themselves
Jupiter:You'll never be a planet no matter what you say, no matter what song you sing.
Pluto: Fine be that way! See if the stars care!
Jupiter: Go whine to Saturn I've had enough of this
. . .
Saturn: Hello Pluto aren't you so proud of your new status?
Pluto: Are you going to bug me about that? Come on why can't I be a planet?
Saturn: Well dwarf planet you are to small your orbit is weird your aren't large and you aren't as gorgeous as me and of course you don't have rings.
Pluto: I will not be called a dwarf planet just because I don't meet your standerds of what a planet should look like!
Saturn: I'm sorry but that's the way it is.
Pluto: I've been a planet for thousands of years!
Saturn: That can change and obviously it has.
Pluto: But . . .but my being a planet's never changed
Saturn: Are you going to behave like this? Seriosuly go I'm not a planet pleading somewhere else.
Pluto: I'm starting to wish I weren't a planet
. . .
Pluto: Mars can you help with something?
Mars: Why must the planets bother me? Fine let me hear it
Pluto: They say I'm a dwarf planet and I'm not can you clear that?
Mars: If we are to clear this we need to get the facts first what makes them say this?
Pluto: I'm to small don't have a right orbit and not good looking and I don't have a full atmosphere all the time
Mars: You must admit you my friend certaintly don't meet those standerds I can disagree with the looks but the rest . . .you know what let me put it this way-You aren't a planet! And even if I could argue otherwise against on of the points (And I can) I can't change the facts
Pluto: How can you be so cold?
Mars: That's the way I am. Take it or leave it. Besides you aren't close to the sun and you are mostly ice unlike me.
Pluto: I'd rather leave it
Mars: Then do so promptly. If you hate being a dwarf planet that's your fault not mine.It's not my buisness.
. . .
Earth: Good day Pluto what is this I hear about you being called a dwarf planet?
Pluto: Oh about that well they've all been saying that I'm not a planet that I'm to small I don't have rings don't have an atmosphere things like those. I don't see why I can't be one
Earth: Dear me! I've never heard of such a thing! alas I am sorry dear pluto but you must admit you certaintly can't be a planet not at those standerds. Besides personally I think a planet must be able to sustain life and have alot of breathable air.
Pluto: Your no better then the rest of them
Earth: I can't help it if my standerds for a planet are rather sorry. I truly am sorry
Pluto: About as sorry as the space dust
Earth: At least I have manners
Pluto: Well no help hear my as well bug Venus
Earth: You can try but Pluto at least I have manners! My sister . . .my sister is about my opposite in all ways
. . .
Venus: Well well well if it isn't Pluto the dwarf planet!
Pluto: I am not a dwarf planet!
Venus: I don't see you spinning correctly I don't see you with a decent atmosphere nor are you hot like me I do not care what you think!
Pluto: You never have
Venus: Oh and so I have if I made you rotate in the opposite direction you would to
Pluto: That was an accident Sun declared that!
Venus: That doesn't mean I can change my view
Pluto: Then I declare you deserved to spin that way! And because Sun said means that I don't have to change my views
Venus: Stop acting like a planet! Planets have rights! Dwarfs don't!
Pluto: Well if your going to be nasty for eternity I'll just leave
. . .
Pluto: Mercury! Just help me! They call me dwarf planet and they have been ugly about it!
Mercury: Well they have no right to claim that. You are just as planet like as I if you haven't made an impact or have a odd orbit it's because your small. There catching hornets not bees with their honey that's for sure. Shall we go tell Sun about their manners?
Pluto: At least get him to declare that we all must respect dwarf planets!
Mercury: Very well let's go tell him
Act 3
Mercury: Your majesty do we have permission to enter your presence?
Sun: Yes you may
Mercury: I hope you won't mind sir if Pluto joins?
Sun: I do not mind I don't favor planets
Mercury: Good! Because Pluto has a problem that needs a touch of your power so to speak
Sun: Speak then Pluto
Pluto: You see Neptune came to me with the news that I was nolonger called a planet so I complained to all of the planets they all said they agreed that I wasn't a dwarf planet and they were aweful to me
Sun: Hmmm I understand you have been aweful to them as well. It was part of the agreement you'd admit your guilt in countering Uranus and Venus's orbit and that it was your fault and I'd let you go free . . .
Pluto: I have kept my part of the agreement
Sun: That you have very well but they haven't kept their part of it
Pluto: You made an agreement with them?
Sun: They'd leave you alone after that and put it behind them.
Pluto: Then you'll punish them?
Sun: No at least not yet I don't have to. I'll keep on growing and growing until I knock them out of their orbits. However I will tell them off.
Mercury: Thanks for sorting this out you majesty.
Sun: It's my job I take pleasure in it
Pluto: I guess that's see you next planet meeting?
. . .
Sun: All planets of this solar system welcome I have heard that Pluto has been called a dwarf planet. I will have no tolerance for this act. Please remember that he has kept his part of the argeement you have not. Pluto is a part of the solar system and obviously has no reason to be called a dwarf planet. What do you have to say for yourselves Jupiter and Saturn I greatly suspect you are behind this
Saturn: I . . .I . . .am sorry but still . . .
Jupiter: I have no regrets!
Sun: You will I'm sure. Just remember this-you can't take back what you have done and should Pluto be a true planet which he is we won't be forgiven for calling him such.
Jupiter: Very well. I see that your king not me
. . .
And perhaps we all could learn from their mistakes! What did you learn from this play that's moral? Whos your favorite character? What's your favorite part? Why?
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Hello, Katnes. I am here to provide you a review. Let’s get started, shall we?
I. PLOT
Basically the whole plot was that the pluto was declared as not a planet of the Solar System, but a dwarf planet ( which has been proven by scientists, and that the issue is still ongoing to this day ). I must say that the plot does tackle on the real life issue on whether Pluto is a planet or not, and if it efficient to be part of the Solar System. I liked the plot itself. Only because it involves Pluto as one of the realistic issues in our world today.
II. NITPICKS & STUFF
Okay, there are a LOT of grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure issues throughout the whole script, but I am not going to discuss those because I want to focus on the aspect of the script.
The formatting of the script needs to be changed. The names of the characters should have been bolded for example:
Pluto: Blah Blah Blah.
The whole script is kind of hard to read when you don’t add the bolded names and if you don’t separate the information of the play from the actual script.
I personally don’t believe that there should be ACTS in this script. This is merely a skit because of how short it is. That is my personal opinion though, so don’t think too much of it.
III. OVERALL
Overall, I liked the concept of the script and the representation of characters as planets of the Solar System, but I think you need to go back and edit this entirely. This must be a raw script without proofreading and editing, so I am assuming you wanted feedback on the concept of the script itself.I did understand the lesson, which is another issue in today’s world, which is never judge someone negatively because they are different. Other than that, be sure you check your grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure. I can’t tell if you need improving in that because like I stated before, this script might just be a raw draft without the proofreading. Like, this isn’t the final publication of the script. Keep it up though. Keep writing and enjoy the rest of your day.
- Kanome
Thank you. I really do need to work on it more. I never was good with grammer. As for the plot . . .Well what exactly can one do?
First of all, I must say the way characters are introduced sounds pretty cool but there is a lack of punctuation making it extremely hard to read. I don't think grammar nazis are gonna be able to go any further from this point.
The grammar, spelling and punctuation issues are present throughout the script. Mistakes like 'there' instead of 'they're' or 'their' turn people like me off.
I highly recommend you to get Grammarly software as it'll help you with the basic editing.
Other than these mistakes, what your story really lacks is content. It feels like a fifth-grade kid has written this. The arguments given by all planets are mostly the same. And even the ending is abrupt. I was hoping there would be something in the plot or that you'd at least have a story to tell. There is nothing for me to review. Maybe you could do a little more research on why Pluto was declared as a dwarf planet. Or perhaps, even with the arguments you have, you could try making a better story.
I'll try that. But how to I find the version that I can edit? In other words where do they store my posted. . .err published stuff that I can edit?
Besides I intended this to be a play if you will.
And I am not a fourth grader What content did you want? This was anout pluto complaining about being called. What did you like was anything funny?
You can edit your work on the upper right side of this page. Just go into editing mode, edit whatever you need to edit, and then save changes.
Cheers!